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Re: Dream sweet [WIP, Help me please!]

Reply #10 on: October 09, 2006, 04:47:38 pm
Nice edit Tremulant. I would put some light on his/her cheeks, but I'll wait until I better see the where the lightsource is.

One thing this needs though is a second diagonal. At the moment the current (and only) diagonal in the picture is going from the face and up towards the top of the tree. With all the mass in the bottom right corner, it needs something equal in the top left corner to get a second diagonal and create harmony. (Sorry if it sounds corny, I'm just using the expressions I've been taught.)

As I can't know if everyone knows about lines/diagonals in composition, I'm linking to wiki just in case: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Composition_%28visual_arts%29
Check under 'Lines'.

Looking good so far.  :y:

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Re: Dream sweet [WIP, Help me please!]

Reply #11 on: October 09, 2006, 05:13:36 pm
Nice edit Tremulant. I would put some light on his/her cheeks, but I'll wait until I better see the where the lightsource is.

One thing this needs though is a second diagonal. At the moment the current (and only) diagonal in the picture is going from the face and up towards the top of the tree. With all the mass in the bottom right corner, it needs something equal in the top left corner to get a second diagonal and create harmony. (Sorry if it sounds corny, I'm just using the expressions I've been taught.)

As I can't know if everyone knows about lines/diagonals in composition, I'm linking to wiki just in case: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Composition_%28visual_arts%29
Check under 'Lines'.

Looking good so far.  :y:

Actually, to me this piece is about motion, and creating two strong diagonals is the fastest way to make a piece feel solid., though i agree that balance in those corners will help, adding something to the top left and subtracting from the bottom right.  alternatively, you could go for a trinity in your composition, but that would require some real pushing around and redrawing

OT: lol about that wiki article, they chose a horrible example for the rule of thirds.  The bottom needs to be brought up and either the right side extended or the left side brought in before the composition will start to show any strength.
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Re: Dream sweet [WIP, Help me please!]

Reply #12 on: October 10, 2006, 12:15:34 am
OT: lol about that wiki article, they chose a horrible example for the rule of thirds.

Agreed. Didn't read that part.

I understand what you mean, but as it stands now, the way the hair is connected to the branch is not a very fluid motion. (In my eyes of course.)

I was not suggesting to use a static line, but rather give the eye a second line to balance out what I feel is a very un organic diagonal. If the line could flow more in a curve from the head, to the branch and swing down the treetrunk, then I would agree. It works more like a rope at the moment. I can't make an edit at the moment, but I'll update with one later to show what I mean.

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Re: Dream sweet [WIP, Help me please!]

Reply #13 on: October 10, 2006, 03:49:32 pm
My biggest concern is the forehead, it should be much larger.

I agree.
Only thing i can idd with that: leave the piece alone for a while and try doing it again another day with a different view on it.
It looks like a complicated piece wich needs some mind cracking, that doesn't work 24/7.

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Re: Dream sweet [WIP, Help me please!]

Reply #14 on: October 11, 2006, 03:32:48 am
Thanks, everyone for the great crits. I'll try to incorporate as much as I can in the update.

Trem: I like the edit, but the large chin makes her look kind of...manly. I like what you've done with the eye and nose, though. Thanks.

Snake + Adarias: Thanks for the info about Diagonals. I'll try to fix some of that stuff, mmkay? But until then I need some ideas as to what should go in the upper-left corner. Maybe another stream of stars?
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I understand what you mean, but as it stands now, the way the hair is connected to the branch is not a very fluid motion. (In my eyes of course.)
I'll try to take care of that if it doesn't entail too much work.

Everyone else: Thanks much for y'all comments and whatnot. I'll try to update asap. (Which, in fact, might not be 'till the weekend.)



Oh, and BTW, I still need help with the hair. It's something quite new to me and I'm not sure how to go about it.