Hey Kizu, it is nice to see you post more of your art here.
Let me start by pointing things I think are working:
-I really like that screen shine, it is not realistic but it is a really nice effect.
-Your long lines are now way more organized than on your last art, it is really noticeable.
-The lights that shine on the characters have a nice tone to them and keep the scene alive.
-You kept the hue shift you were already doing, it makes everything more interesting.
Now for the things that i think you could work on:
-You clean up was made in a haste. It shows in the bold black corners that you left in the outlines and in the lack of outlines in some places, don't worry too much about speed now. Art is a marathon, not a race.
-You have some perspective issues, this book is very good and might help you: Perspective For Comic Book Artists by David Chelsea. It is a fast and enjoyable read.(It was recommended by Rebecca Sugar from Steven Universe in a stream)
-Be careful to respect the light sources you defined. You have a strong light coming from the right and a strong light from the TV and the shadows from the cushions are in the opposite direction.
Here are some more notes I made on your image:
Hope I could help you a bit.
Keep it up!
