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Ironman [WIP]

on: January 13, 2010, 04:00:22 am
no face and bad hands but is everything else ok?

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #1 on: January 13, 2010, 04:23:44 am
I think one of the things that's gonna help this a lot is removing black outlines:


It's a lazy edit, but you get the idea.
I also moved the head 1px to the left, and some of the chest lines, since they seemed to be looking forward, when the character is standing to the left.

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #2 on: January 13, 2010, 04:37:37 am
thanks that looks a lot better. now all i have to do is the face

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #3 on: January 13, 2010, 05:51:28 am

face is added. no longer WIP

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #4 on: January 13, 2010, 06:03:20 pm
You're not supposed to take other people's edits and expand on them. The intention of edits is that you learn from them, not copy them.

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #5 on: January 13, 2010, 06:08:48 pm
You're not supposed to take other people's edits and expand on them. The intention of edits is that you learn from them, not copy them.

And besides that, I don't think that piece is no longer WIP. My edit was really lame, i just simply colored all the black lines altogether, and made some minor tweaks.
I don't think it's finished.

Don't know what you want that Ironman for, but it's definitly not perfect.

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #6 on: January 14, 2010, 04:16:13 am
i never said it was perfect i said its done didnt post it but i finished it

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #7 on: January 14, 2010, 04:40:56 am
post it then

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #8 on: January 14, 2010, 05:37:01 am

there

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #9 on: January 14, 2010, 07:15:08 am
part 2 - the musical

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #10 on: January 14, 2010, 09:01:04 am
oh lawd

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #11 on: January 14, 2010, 09:11:41 am
Did I miss something? Why are we suddenly mocking him?

Solid start, Reaper. Likeness is good. The stance & proportions are pretty solid, although it could probably be a little more heroic - leaning forward a little more (not too much), size of the chest & shoulder area increased, etc.

It's good that you reverted to before the edit & worked on the outlines yourself. Still, the outlines are pretty prominent. It's sort of a style preference, but outlines are eschewed in pixel-art more than normal comic-art partly because of how big the lines are, proportionally, when within such a small space. Especially internal detail lines - for instance, the line on his inner thigh makes it look a bit like he has an erection - simply removing the outline there should fix that.

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #12 on: January 14, 2010, 09:47:18 am
thank you very much. i must say that is the best criticism i've ever had. i've posted this on almost every forum i could find and i got 20 views and 0 comments. i fixed the erection thing just then as well as some other stuff

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Re: Ironman [WIP]

Reply #13 on: January 14, 2010, 10:21:11 pm
ahaha! awesome!

his eyes are sorta hard to see. might be my monitor.
His eyes have a glow to them http://www.historyguy.com/comicshistory/iron_man_beats_cap.jpg