woman [wip][NUDITY/REVEALING]

[balls01]

hello, merry christmas.

well im working on a naked erotic lady for the sake of boredome and teenage years, basically im asking for anatomy issues and what ever else you can pick up,

also if i post this on pixeljoint would i get reported or will i need a [nudity] tag?


i got the make pixels not war off the site:http://www.supertotto.com/0_SUPERTOTTO_1.0_lastdays/index.html

also theres no reference i did this from scratch

[NaCl]

Hey balls glad you are working on a complex piece like this. It's looking quite good!

I think some things could be improved though:

- Her right shoulder is way too big. Her left one looks a little small, but it works if you reduce the size of the right one
- Her hips are too short. The pelvis will take up more room then you currently have
- The neck seems to be too far to the right
- Her back leg doesn't seem to support her

Here is my edit, where I tried to address these issues:


I'm still not totally happy with her right shoulder in my edit, but I'm sure you can figure it out. Also, I must say good job on the shading, looks mostly correct to me.

[balls01]

the only problem with your edit i can see is that now the thigh looks like shes obese, ill merge both the pelvis you drew and my leg together because i am sooo proud and i dont really want to lose it =D

old pose
new pose NaCl has made

ive edited yet again on the pelvis to more NaCl said

i find problems with the chest and hands too

[heyy13]

Uhhh... what? NaCl's edit does not look obese, infact i was going to suggest the thigh be thickened even more.

Also i can't really see a differance between your two poses.

I'd suggest a bust reduction, making the hands larger and giving the shoulders more definition. : )

[balls01]

yeah true i want like a stick woman (not literaly anoone whos just gona draw a stickfigure and post it)


made thigh same as NaCl's made hands bigger still not happy with them also wat do you mean "I'd suggest a bust reduction"

[Dr D]

Make her boobs smaller.

[balls01]

any particular reason or just because it looks shabby

ill do so and also in what way like smaller in higher up or less round, what?

[NaCl]

They're quite big but I don't know why he would shrink them, unless he was trying to create a very realistic style. He basically admitted he was making an erotic piece. What I'm saying is that the breast size is a stylistic choice, and thus I don't feel it is a great critique.

[balls01]

the material looks unnatural and looks like its defying gravity should i make the picture longer and do more of the legs and make it more natural or keep the same size and get rid of it?

quick edit/preview-
better edit-

edited-
arm,hand
legs
cloth/material

made cloth wrap around legs


i just did that pose 2 see the problems and i noticed that the had should be flipped

[balls01]

i suck way bad at drawing faces but heres my try dont laugh ok because i know you are becuase youll expect something half decent well ive been working bout 2 hrs on this now and im getting apsolutely nowhere its 12:08AM i even made a new file thats how crap it is

here we go ready, set ... LAUGH
im too emrarrased

 

i feel like im going to get many comments saying to try harder n crap but seriosly i tried my friken hardest!