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Kitchen

on: August 08, 2008, 08:35:59 pm


WIP.  Kinda.  Crits?

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Re: Kitchen

Reply #1 on: August 08, 2008, 08:44:53 pm
The proportions between scenery and the person look off. Person looks too big. Like if he/she would stand up the door would be rather small.
Also the receeding hallway looks a bit odd, not quite sure if that works. Also the door on the left suggests that that's not the outside, so why is there a window behind the sink? A window to the hallway? Odd stuff.

The general pixeltechnique and the colours are quite nice I think, the stove is very straight grey tho and perhaps you could unify the palette a tiny bit more and get colours from one place to others a bit more, not have em so secluded.

Looking forward to an update.
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Re: Kitchen

Reply #2 on: August 09, 2008, 11:08:08 pm


I edited the woman, her size should be closer to normal now.
I added a siberian tiger in the doorframe like you suggested.  The door now leads outside.

Still not sure where I'm going with this.  Not satisfactory though.

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Re: Kitchen

Reply #3 on: August 10, 2008, 12:35:16 am
the woman still looks kind of big. i don't really like the tiger. i think the piece would be a lot stronger without it. the kid going for the cookies with his mother lying dead on the floor is some badass shit.

i don't really know where i'm going with this either...
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Re: Kitchen

Reply #4 on: August 10, 2008, 04:15:29 am
The tiger definitely seems out of place, but I agree that the kid going for the cookies with his mother dead is awesome. Also, the darker colors in the second one look much better in my opinion. It's great so far and I can't wait to see the final piece.  ;D
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Re: Kitchen

Reply #5 on: August 10, 2008, 05:21:30 am
There are some things here that bothered me so much I made an edit:



Whats with all the perspective flips?

The shadow UNDER the window, the door, the huge horizontal gap in the tiles.

It messes with your eyes.

Anyway I circled what I changed.

In short - tile lines too thick horizontally, door glass too tall and funny things going on with perspective, window too tall and shadows where you shouldn't see them, chair legs too thin ( compared with other chairs ), cylinder cuboard doors, and whats with the fridge handles?

The tiger is a nice touch but needs some work on the face.

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Re: Kitchen

Reply #6 on: August 12, 2008, 06:55:34 pm
update

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Re: Kitchen

Reply #7 on: August 12, 2008, 08:46:10 pm
The proportions between scenery and the person look off. Person looks too big. Like if he/she would stand up the door would be rather small.
Also the receeding hallway looks a bit odd, not quite sure if that works. Also the door on the left suggests that that's not the outside, so why is there a window behind the sink? A window to the hallway? Odd stuff.
Could be an "L" shaped house, where the door to the left leads to a hallway, while the door to the right leads outside(as implied by the windows in the door).

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Re: Kitchen

Reply #8 on: August 12, 2008, 09:28:06 pm
Dusty is correctish.  Some parts are based on my own house, which has a room that was built after the rest of the house, forming and L shape if you don't count the other half of the house.
Oh, And I still mean to work more on the woman in the floor.  And figure out where it's headed.  Suggestions welcome.