GBA SP

[MadeyeMike]

Hiya everyone. I just found this site today and it looks pretty great, I think I might come here more often 

Hopefully You guy's can help me get better at spriting So here's my first piece for review, a GBA SP



I made this 100% myself using my GBA SP for reference, So you guys have any tips for me to make it better?




oh, and I do have one question about the rules. It says not to rip artwork. Does that mean I can't post a sprite I made from official game art?


Anyway Thanks very much for your Time 

[Sherman Gill]

Pretty good .
First off, though, the darker blue is far too saturated! You should tone it down a little I think.
Also, those buttons aren't just decals, they're three dimension objects, and you should try to convey that in your picture.
I haven't looked at a SP in a long long time, so I don't know if the circles around the buttons are indents or just painted on there or something, but if they're indents, you need to make it look like indents instead of just a black outline.



Also: The ripping bit in the rules, that's about stealing art. Pretty much, if you haven't made it, it's considered a rip. As for edited sprites, I don't think it's against the rules, but it's generally frowned upon, and I doubt you'll get many critiques for 'em.

[MadeyeMike]

made the blue 100 less saturated and added some shadow to the buttons and the indents around them, any better?

[brianskywalker]

I'd say the dark blue is still a bit too saturated. The indentations around the buttons look a lot better now, but you might want to add a highlight and the lower edge. I think some shines on the screen might be rather nice too, it's really up to you.  

Another thing you might want to think about is messing with the palette a bit. I think I would make the light blue a bit more saturated, and not so much of a lavender color, since the SP really didn't come that color anyways. Probably a slightly greener blue would be more appropriate. Also you might want to use a dark dark blue instead of pure black for the outlines, it might look really good.

[MadeyeMike]

Most of the outlines are already a dark blue (light:32) #000040.  Think I should up the lightness on it?

and the light blue(#8080FF) is fully saturated. I could take out some red/green witch would make it darker, should I do that?

Should I add more colors to the palette? I'm at 10 right now (not counting the back/text)



Edit: Any better?

[PypeBros]

looks much better, imho.
Another edit i'd personnally make is to gray the text on the back side.
Right now, they look like a tiny piano keyboard. I wouldn't expect greeked text to have that level of contrast at that distance ...

[MadeyeMike]

thats cause that part is a barcode.

[Shrike]

One thing i think you need right now is AAing around the button indents and some other parts too.

Like so:


I made the light source more defined, AAed quite a bit and did some general shading and touching up, giving it much more depth which it was lacking. I also added the green light and charging light cuz' i coulden't help myself.

But even though it was lacking depth quite a bit, the palette is fantastic and the design is incredibly accurate. Keep up the awesome work!

[Terley]

theres no real need for 2 colours in that palette coran all its serving to do is blur by banding all around the inside lines, at 100% its just doesn't seem like its doing this any significance. I agree some smart use of AAing could do wonders to this but first you need to gather a solid set of colours, this could even be done with just 3 blues if pushed to it.

edit-

But I do think some shading would work on this, it is a three dimensional object afterall so plastering it flat will only force it to look 2D. Though it has flat plains some direction of light should make this visually more interesting. I've tried to alter your palette slightly so there's a consistancy from light to dark with no jumps and apply it to what I would try to do.

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More than anything I think it's important to focus on its readability, simplify parts so at 100% it can be easily recognised. Make sure every colour has a purpose and try to make full use of your palette.

[MadeyeMike]

hmm, the hinge doesn't look right on yours. I've been trying to find my SP for ref but I can't find it and the pics on the net just aren't cutting it.

So I think I'm going to put this on hold till I find it, and work on something else for awhile. Thanks for all your help everyone