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[WIP] Self portrait

on: December 12, 2006, 11:18:36 pm

c&c welcome

colorize ver (without shading)

c&c welcome
« Last Edit: December 14, 2006, 01:08:41 am by Bers »
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Re: Self portrait

Reply #1 on: December 13, 2006, 12:13:25 am
I like this, it looks very good.
two things bother me though, the base of the chair and the arm laying across your body.
The base of the chair seems rather thick and rounded which is an unusual shape for such a chair.
The arm seems rather straight, as if it is not bending, it could be the angle and how the body is positioned, but the whole chest/shoulder area next to the hidden part of the arm looks odd. maybe you could bring the shouilder, arm forwards a bit to compensate for the other shoulder/arm which is stretched back.
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Re: Self portrait

Reply #2 on: December 13, 2006, 12:02:19 pm
Looks great so far. I think I know what Alex means with that arm. I find the position of the hand makes it look like it'd force a normal person to actually attempt to reach over, to manage that hand position. I think it'd look a great deal more natural if you tried to have him simply rest the hand on top of the thigh, rather than on the side of it. But other than that it's excellent so far.
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Re: Self portrait

Reply #3 on: December 13, 2006, 05:10:26 pm
Thx Alex and Rox
i try to fix strange part of the pix

new ver
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Re: Self portrait

Reply #4 on: December 14, 2006, 12:20:52 am
Me likes!

Very well done. Great idea too. I love the casual look.
I'm very impressed with the large image of you and your friend chilling at the desk.

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Re: Self portrait

Reply #5 on: December 14, 2006, 12:22:07 am
is your friend a body builder?  he seems to have beefy arms (which is ok) but an abnormally large chest....
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Re: Self portrait

Reply #6 on: December 14, 2006, 12:35:00 am
So far this is really cool, I'm really interested in how this turns out. 

The monitors seem false, however, in how they are facing the viewer head on.  I think a slightly titled angle would be much more interesting.
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Re: Self portrait

Reply #7 on: December 14, 2006, 12:36:42 am
Hey, I just noticed something...

Is your friend wearing tabi, Bers? If so, I think that's pretty neat and interesting.
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Re: Self portrait

Reply #8 on: December 14, 2006, 12:48:31 am
Quote from: Feron on December 14, 2006, 12:22:07 am
is your friend a body builder?  he seems to have beefy arms (which is ok) but an abnormally large chest....
he body builder and realy aikido man.
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Re: Self portrait

Reply #9 on: December 14, 2006, 12:50:32 am
Quote from: Darien on December 14, 2006, 12:35:00 am
So far this is really cool, I'm really interested in how this turns out. 

The monitors seem false, however, in how they are facing the viewer head on.  I think a slightly titled angle would be much more interesting.

i planing paint more? this part probe composition
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Re: Self portrait

Reply #10 on: December 14, 2006, 12:56:24 am
Quote from: Ryona on December 14, 2006, 12:36:42 am
Hey, I just noticed something...

Is your friend wearing tabi, Bers? If so, I think that's pretty neat and interesting.
no but...
it my vision he style, thx by great idea, I necessarily give him a present on the new year :))
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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #11 on: December 15, 2006, 05:07:25 am

i hope i fix most part of this pix
c&c welcome again
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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #12 on: December 15, 2006, 05:21:39 am
Looks really good, but is that part of an arm I see between the monitor and computer tower thingy?
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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #13 on: December 15, 2006, 05:25:00 am
damn i forgot kill this color test
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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #14 on: December 15, 2006, 05:34:37 am
You seem to be using a lot of colours unnecessarily. The lightest colour in the beard can be replaced by one of the skin tones, the lightest part of the glasses can be replaced with the lightest skin tone, many colours in the hair are near repeats (both of other hair shades, and of skin tones), etc. Also, the colouring is starting to get a bit pillowy, mainly due to the abundance of shades and amount of AA you're using. Limited AA can be used to great effect, as can a small palette, when properly applied.

Overall, though, lots of this comes down to personal preference. High colour count, for example, isn't necessarily bad; it's up to you. I really love these lines, too, and I'm sure the finished piece'll look fantastic. Keep it up :y:
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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #15 on: December 16, 2006, 03:46:08 am
[sneak into a forum for a small update]

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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #16 on: December 17, 2006, 03:33:27 pm
little more update :)
my friend back...
« Last Edit: December 17, 2006, 07:36:29 pm by Bers »
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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #17 on: December 18, 2006, 06:40:16 am
and more update to clothes and hairs



c&c pls
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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #18 on: December 18, 2006, 08:38:52 am
Oooh! Very nice! Looking very good. Me likes.

I'm sure it's still not done yet, so I'll hold my critz 'til then.
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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #19 on: December 18, 2006, 08:46:25 am
pls tell me what wrong.
i think "hair" on two man is not good.
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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #20 on: December 18, 2006, 08:56:41 am
Ok, well, for starters, I kinda like what you did with your friend's hair in the second last one. The last one you have there it looks like he has a "bowl" cut.

The stands of the monitors could use some AA.

Your pants and chair obviously still need work.

That's about it.
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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #21 on: December 18, 2006, 09:08:52 am
what ver you like?
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Re: [WIP] Self portrait

Reply #22 on: December 18, 2006, 10:02:51 am
Defintly the last, I don't think the first on fits in, and the second one looks like there's peanut butter smeared in his hair  :crazy:
Looking nice so far, good luck
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