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Offline Godslayer

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Re: P90&Sprite [Warning: LEGS]

Reply #30 on: November 06, 2006, 09:34:19 pm
O the great one? What the hell?

Quit kissing up.
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Re: P90&Sprite [Warning: LEGS]

Reply #31 on: November 07, 2006, 04:45:02 am
O the great one? What the hell?

Quit kissing up.
Pff... pixel artists like to revere each other. :P
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Re: P90&Sprite [Warning: LEGS]

Reply #32 on: November 07, 2006, 08:54:30 am
God is jsut jealous :P.

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Re: P90&Sprite [Warning: LEGS]

Reply #33 on: November 07, 2006, 03:20:46 pm
Hokay, enough ten-word posts.  (Oh, for the 100-char rule back...)

First off, I'd like to agree with Helm that uncropped canvases are annoying.  If your sprite is 40x80, you don't need an 800x600 canvas.  That's wasted white space.  It takes ten seconds to get rid of, even in paint.

That said, on to the critique.  This piece really doesn't have much to critique yet; it's barely started.  The guy is still off-balance; he needs to lean more to the right if he doesn't want to fall over.  This is true even if he is leaning around a corner.  Leaning around a corner is still leaning, and you'll fall if you lean to far.  This is only false if you are holding on to the corner, which he is not, considering he's holding a gun.  The legs are too thin; they look like toothpicks.  He appears to be a soldier.  Soldiers are muscular and have meat on their bones.  The arms are blobby and unproportional, and might be a bit too short.

To sum up, this is barely started.  I critiqued some stuff, but all of it could be fixed in about 5 minutes and is mostly irrelevant because it could be summed up by a comment on the very preliminary stage this is in.  Do some real work on this, show us clean forms, and we can provide more helpful critique.  You've made progress in drawing legs, now show us clean legs.  Good luck!
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Re: P90&Sprite [Warning: LEGS]

Reply #34 on: November 07, 2006, 04:58:29 pm
Looking at more references could probably help you greatly. The anatomy itself isn't THAT bad, but the poses you create seem to make very little sense to me. Before you start drawing something, at least try doing what it is you're drawing, yourself, and use your own experience as a reference. My point in this case is that, when leaning around a corner with a pistol, you would most likely hold the pistol with only one hand and expose only your head, shoulder and arm. If, for some reason, you'd need to use both arms to hold the gun, I'd think you'd rather simply step out from behind the wall (while still exposing as little of your own body as possible).

"Leaning" around corners is never actual leaning, in combat. Holding the gun sideways also makes little sense.

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Re: P90&Sprite [Warning: LEGS]

Reply #35 on: November 07, 2006, 08:23:13 pm


I was experimenting for a character behind this whole Shooting person.

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Re: P90&Sprite [Warning: LEGS]

Reply #36 on: November 08, 2006, 08:42:54 am
BUMP. I need more CC and comment about my drawing please ;)

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Re: P90&Sprite [Warning: LEGS]

Reply #37 on: November 08, 2006, 11:47:47 am
The pose doesn't make any sense as it looks like a leg is missing, the outlining is inconsistent and scribbley, there's no sense of depth to the lighting and the stuff around the main figure is just a mess.

There, happy you bumped it in stark defiance of the forum's rules?
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Re: P90&Sprite [Warning: LEGS]

Reply #38 on: November 08, 2006, 12:33:17 pm
"I was experimenting for a character behind this whole Shooting person."
"God is jsut jealous"
"I find more attacked than critiqued. He is leaning from a corner. And I don't know how to make something transparent... care to share?."
"I'm gonna make my own line similar but unique from yours."
"I was holding a P90 killed if I were in Real Life and I was aiming it jsut like what you said and Kill's example Tongue That was the exact thing I missed!"

Btw, are you sure English is your first language? [If so, then forgive me, otherwise] Proofreading your sentences before you post wouldn't hurt, will it? I don't really care about spelling mistakes, but many of the sentences don't even make sense.
These are just some of your comments in this thread alone.

What are those grey things? They look like dark clouds with thunder coming out below them.
As for critique, there's not much I can help you with regarding this pixel piece (where do I start?), just do some real life study when you get the chance!
« Last Edit: November 08, 2006, 12:46:34 pm by Frychiko »
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Re: P90&Sprite [Warning: LEGS]

Reply #39 on: November 09, 2006, 07:45:44 am
Hi Rerg1,

Your problems are:
1) You pixel stuff that is too small.
2) You don't have basic drawing skills
3) You don't spend enough time on the pixel art

Here is an animated gif showing what I mean. Your art is about the standard of the fourth frame. You need to color your stuff,
spend hours tweaking it, and only then post it for crits.



I recommend you really finish a piece before posting again.
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