some new stuff

[Kennethfejer]

haven't posted in a while, been too busy at work :/ , but i managed to put some stuff together today.
let me know what you think : )

the haunted swamp


Girl with cellphone

[AdamAtomic]

great stuff   love the haunted swamp, though i'm not sure what the purple power meter is for on the bottom, and it takes up a lot of room compared to the health meter and stuff.  the girl is great too, especially her face and hair, I think i'd prefer a different shirt though, that one looks a little drafty...

[Tinygiant]

Nice trees, little slime dude is really cute, reminds me of the Rocket Slime game on the Ninty DS.

[vedsten]

f. great! that haunted swamp is  , vivid colors, top design (espc. the trees) and lovely creatures. What really does it for me though is, that everytime i see one of your mockups i can picture the actual game and wanna play it

minor crits:
- the main charactor seems to blend in with the bg a bit too much, mayby another swordcolor would do it, since the current one is pretty close to the water color
- the color of the cell-girls top is a bit too saturated for my taste

[Andy Tran]

 Wow this is awesome, I am glad you made new works.

[Faceless]

That swamp is all kinds of awesome.
The hero's legs are out of perspective though, and could do with being rotated to the left along the x-axis.

A quick example where I only moved his right foot because that was the quickest and easiest way to illustrate my point.

[Joseph]

god damn I love you work ken.  excellent stuff here.  the mockup looks very "spooky"ish.  the girl looks great, but nothing id look at more than twice.

[rabidbaboy]

Great trees, and I like the guy's shield.
And Faceless, I think they should be bent.

[Faceless]

My edit wasn't about straightening the legs, it was about the placement of the feet. I was just too lazy to do anything more than drag them around and change a few pixels.

[Xion]

Well, Faceless already pointed out the first thing I saw, so I'll just say that I think the sword's blade blends to the water too much. The way the shield faces straight at the viewer like that bugs me a bit, but it makes sense, I can see.
I ditto Joseph about the girl.
Awesome trees.
The nearest little weed to the yellow blob (not the one blocked by the character) looks like it has a misplaced blue (trasparent?) pixel on the toppest leaf.
Hmmm...That's it.
Real great schtuff. I remember that looking at your stuff a couple years ago is what first got me into making mockups.

[Kennethfejer]

thanks all 

vedsten:

f. great! that haunted swamp is , vivid colors, top design (espc. the trees) and lovely creatures. What really does it for me though is, that everytime i see one of your mockups i can picture the actual game and wanna play it

thanks, im glad you think that.
that's the thing i aim for : )

Xion Night:
yeah, it looks like i placed the layer with the water ripples above the tree layer, its an easy fix.

faceless:
yeah i think you are right, might need to have a look at the dudes legs and shadow again.

[instant]

Lovely. My only crit is that it took me a second look to notice that there was a character on the screen. I suggest more contrast on the protagonist at least.

[fil_razorback]

I suggest you stop making stuff so good that it makes me regret having ever pushed pixels together >.<

[Pawige]

Just a quick edit on the cellphone girl, her far boob was bugging me, it's not right yet but you get the idea I imagine. I fiddled around with just about everything else some too, ignore all that, I just can't leave well enough alone.



Other than that, great work!

[Kyle]

Well my only crit is on the meters at the top. The MP meter is at 8/25, yet is more than half full. 

[CrematedPumpkin]

Well my only crit is on the meters at the top. The MP meter is at 8/25, yet is more than half full. 

So desperate to find a mistake  .
Hmm...I can't find anything to crit either...
Was that swamp at all inspired by WoW? All of the meters, including the pet meter are the same in overall design. Very nice.

[snake]

Now this here is the reason I joined here in the first place.

Love those trees. Very Boktai come to think of it. Ah well, instead of all the praise babble I could be doing: Critique time.

The only things bothering me a bit here is the sword and shield. On the shield, the lighter line that goes through the middle does not give me the idea that it's juts light reflection but rather that it's a metal plate that stands out. The line also makes the edge to the left merge with the rest of the character. Maybe you could use more of a single colour to make it stand out more. For the sword, it merges with the background a bit. this could just be coincidence i placement, but it's also got a thick, dark outline that stays the same around the whole shape. If you for example add a white edge on one side, it would be easier to see the blade itself.

Tried an edit:


Used Faceless' edit.
The shield here isn't exactly perfect here, but this is just one of the tests. Using the darker or lighter colour for the whole front and not just the bottom or top also worked, but I'll need to look more into it.

As for the girl, I think she's taken care of. Nothing more to report thus far.

Keep it up 

[Cazador]

I really like this two pics, could be pretty good play an RPG with that sprites. Did you draw it all from zero or take something as reference? The only critic i can make is the sword, i can't understand it well, maybe because the color is nearly to the background and merges with it.
The girl is perfect!
Have a nice day!

[Kennethfejer]

thanks again for all the comments

Pawige:
yeah, you are right about her boob, will need to fix that.
btw, i really like the way you shaded her pants, its kind of fun to see how other people would shade my character, usually i stick to a very flat look, just because i like that, but i really like your edit 

CrematedPumpkin:
the exp panel on the bottom of the screen was inspired by wow, but the rest isn't, at least not that i know of

Kyle:
hehe good point

snake:
yeah the sword blends in with the bg a bit.
the mockup is actually a composite of 5 other mockups i had lying around on my harddisk, so yeah there are a few things, like the sword that dosent go that well together.
the light reflection on the sheild, was actually ment to be a metal plate, but i actually like your edit better, i think im going to have a look at it again, maybe i'll add some kind of emblem on sheild as well.
thanks for the edit 


oh and heres a little teaser for a mockup im working on.

should be pretty obvious what game it is

[GOODNIGHTdestroyer]

I love river city ransom.

Great works, all of them.

Keep it up Kenneth, you never cease to amaze.

[AdamAtomic]

nice!!  RCR for the win, I can't wait to see the level for this one...I think his right leg could use a bit of a tweak to be just right.  post that level soon!

[junkboy]

How many human sacrifices would it take to make Fejer do a full RCR remake? Judging by those two sprites it could be the greatest thing ever.

[AdamTierney]

That mockup looks great. I really want to play it. My only comment is the two trees in the middle don't seem vertically or horizontally offset from one another by 8 or 16 pixels (assuming it's a tiled game).

- Adam