Extremely shaded Homestuck sprite

[MizukiUkitake]

So someone had commissioned a homestuck sprite (or rather, my friend owed them a sprite and wasn't upholding his half of the deal after being payed), and while I was toying with the base, I ended up getting quite carried away with my experimental shading, and four hours later, I ended up with this.



I wasn't happy with the grub's hair, so I followed this DA tutorial -> http://inside-our-mind.deviantart.com/art/Hair-tutorial-01-157441946 for the adult hair.

I'm so super proud of myself, I just had to share it! I've never made anything that looked this pretty before! I'm sure it could use a couple of adjustments though, I'm sure I messed up while trying to follow that tutorial. It has a very spider-web/butterfly look, I think, which isn't too terrible, but I wouldn't be surprised if someone had a better idea that I could apply to the third and final piece of the commission.

EDIT:
I added a really awful ponytail in an attempt to make him look more like a prince, less like a nerd.

[MysteryMeat]

Too much of a greasy look to it, makes him look like a blobfish. Try to play with colors a bit, reduce and rework contrast some

[MizukiUkitake]

Is this better?

[MysteryMeat]

No, more like this. i reduced the contrast so it has a less greasy, slicked appearance and removed an un-needed extra shade on the highlights.
Skin can be reflective but usually it's kind of a dull material.