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Self Portrait

on: May 21, 2013, 05:46:35 pm
So, I have been in need of a good avatar for a while, and I figured that a self portrait would do the trick.
Today I began trying to get the general placement and shape of everything down.

Colors are temporary
Edit:
Did a lot of refining, and got carried away.
If anyone could give me tips on doing hair, it would be much appreciated.

Edit 2:
Refined some of the highlights more.

Edit 3:
Began hair

Edit 4:
Refined hair, coloring, and other random things.

Edit 5:
Changes based on Decroded's suggestions.

Edit 6:
More contrast, fixed eye.

Edit 7:
Changed coloring and contrast.

Edit 8:
Reduced dithering, random tweaks.
« Last Edit: May 28, 2013, 04:07:22 am by Peyton »

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Re: Self Portrait

Reply #1 on: May 22, 2013, 01:04:13 am
Looking pretty cool but needs more contrast IMO, try using a mid-tone greyish colour (or plain grey) for background instead of white, this should help you get a better contrast balance.

The outline is too strong, though this would be fixed by more contrast in ur shadows.
Try using 2 separate colours for outline, one for hair and one for skin, or just get rid of outline all together as its not a requirement.

Area around nostril needs improvement unless your nose really looks like that   ;D

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Re: Self Portrait

Reply #2 on: May 22, 2013, 02:13:17 am
Looking pretty cool but needs more contrast IMO, try using a mid-tone greyish colour (or plain grey) for background instead of white, this should help you get a better contrast balance.

The outline is too strong, though this would be fixed by more contrast in ur shadows.
Try using 2 separate colours for outline, one for hair and one for skin, or just get rid of outline all together as its not a requirement.

Area around nostril needs improvement unless your nose really looks like that   ;D
Thank you for the criticisms :)
I intend to keep the outline how it is out of personal taste, but I see where you are coming from.
I have added more contrast, fixed the messed up inaccurate nostrils, and did some random refining.

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Re: Self Portrait

Reply #3 on: May 22, 2013, 02:54:19 am
I'd say more contrast!
But I can't properly judge that with this half-broken monitor.  :P



The eyes looked rather square so I attempted to fix that too.
And some parts stick out a bit too much with the contrast change.

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Re: Self Portrait

Reply #4 on: May 22, 2013, 03:06:43 am
I'd say more contrast!
But I can't properly judge that with this half-broken monitor.  :P



The eyes looked rather square so I attempted to fix that too.
And some parts stick out a bit too much with the contrast change.
I'll play around with contrast a bit more tomorrow, and I'll fix that eye then too :)

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Re: Self Portrait

Reply #5 on: May 22, 2013, 03:55:15 am
I'd say more contrast!
But I can't properly judge that with this half-broken monitor.  :P



The eyes looked rather square so I attempted to fix that too.
And some parts stick out a bit too much with the contrast change.
Sorry to hear that but yes, that looks much better from my screens.

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Re: Self Portrait

Reply #6 on: May 23, 2013, 12:17:31 am
I played around with the contrast a bit, and this what I got.

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Re: Self Portrait

Reply #7 on: May 23, 2013, 02:53:30 am
Im only looking at this on my phone but it looks like youve darkened the mid-tones a little too much for my taste.
then darkened the outline even more which is still too strong for me and other detracts from the ootherwise atractive artwork.

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Re: Self Portrait

Reply #8 on: May 24, 2013, 12:38:31 am
Updated coloring and contrast again.

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Re: Self Portrait

Reply #9 on: May 24, 2013, 01:36:51 pm
face colours seem pretty good to me.
there was still some things bothering me so i started this edit to give you the idea.


i obviously can't know what u look like but you appeared a little cross-eyed.
The nose was still bothering me and the excessive amount of dithering isn't doing ur complexion any favours.
And neither is the extended gradients across all your shadows, try a mix of smooth gradients and harsher shadows to better define forms.