It's an OK start, but you have some issues there.
You have some serious MC Escher action going on on the inside of the saloon. We should be seeing the back wall and not floor just happily going on into nowhere.
It could also need more contrast. Also I am sure you can find lots of references for actual old saloon buildings which you could look at.
The blue neon tube stuff also is not very readable at a glance either, again mainly because of contrast. Having a brighter painted board in the back and some big painted black letters saying saloon in some oldschool western font would look better I think.
Just some ideas. Keep at it.
