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Offline adcrusher524

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USA Space Marine

on: June 22, 2010, 03:14:21 am


I'm working on this for the challenge at pixeljoint, so I have a week. I think it will be plenty of time though. I was thinking of putting a dead body in the background, but there's not really enough room... errr I hate small canvas's like this. As you can see the shot from the gun is cut off, so do you think I should just have him not shooting?   thanks in advance.

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Re: USA Space Marine

Reply #1 on: June 22, 2010, 11:42:17 am
Hi!

I have a problem with your arms/forearms, seems not "readable" enough to me, It may be caused by your large lighting areas (metal bracelets?) that prevent rest of the arms to be visible.

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Re: USA Space Marine

Reply #2 on: June 22, 2010, 11:56:14 am
you're character doesn't seem to be in the same perspective as the platform

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Re: USA Space Marine

Reply #3 on: June 22, 2010, 12:14:06 pm
thanks for the crit!
@anarkhya- yeah those are metal bracelets. I think I'll take them off so the arm is more readable.
@xbogx- oh crap that's a big problem isn't it... does that mean I have to redo the sprite?

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Re: USA Space Marine

Reply #4 on: June 24, 2010, 08:40:43 pm
ok i worked up an update :

I took out the reflection of the bullet shot just so the colors of the team are easier to see and more readable.  I think im almost done, but more critique is appreciated. thanks.

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Re: USA Space Marine

Reply #5 on: June 24, 2010, 09:01:14 pm
The saturation of the soldier seems way too high; try cutting the saturation value by half, at least.

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Re: USA Space Marine

Reply #6 on: June 24, 2010, 11:58:34 pm
- arms/forearms are ... yes, more readable but not enough IMO. Sadly, I have nothing to suggest for improving, maybe tweak soldier contrast? Dunno...
- a few aliasing on right shoulder edge needs quick correction.
- about the saturation as WM stated, I maybe agree, here is an edit, gently lowering sat in dark blue:


 
your call, now.

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Re: USA Space Marine

Reply #7 on: June 25, 2010, 02:30:41 am
Ah just letting you know you ARE allowed to change the background. Try shifting to a yellow or something to help the guy pop more. :)

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Re: USA Space Marine

Reply #8 on: June 25, 2010, 02:45:34 am
so like this?

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