
I liked the warmer color a lot better for the outlines, good call! I toned down the highlights like you said, and I tightened the bikini top, and changed her eyes, albeit not exactly as pictured.
This is where I deviated from your advice a bit more, because I wasn't too sure about the use of the color between the skin tone and the outline, and I instead used that color to define some of the areas where skin touches skin to make it look less confusing around the fingers and chest and add a bit of color to her thighs. I did something similar up around the hair. I didn't give her lipstick and I changed her eyebrows a bit too.
As for changes outside of what you had suggested, I also shifted the whites towards yellow and tried to make them less intense to match the warmer outline as well.
I deviated more on gut feeling, but if you think I should have stuck more to the image you sent, just say so.