I like the exaggerated foreshortening, personally
You are however trying to spread shit out. One of the key things in foreshortening, so far as I've learned, is that it's important to get out of the habit trying to make everything visible. The near object obscures the stuff that's connected to it but behind it.
Here's a mediocre edit to show you what I mean+some random other changes.
In spite of my edit, I recommend that if you add a lighter color not to add specular highlights to the skin
I did it mostly since it's easier than full-shading. Oiled up naked chicks are over-used in art today.