here's a few things I notice in a quick glance:
1) different pixel sizes on your 3rd image. different pixel sizes makes a work look sloppy and unfinished
2) no shading on the 2nd and 4th image, or at least nothing noticeable; makes them look flat and unpolished; try finding a light source and applying shading from there, there should be some good tutorials on here
3) line work is pretty sloppy on 2nd and 4th image, a lot of pixel noise which makes it unreadable -- trying sticking to single-pixel wide lines if you can, and continue from there
4) the first one has some really good shading, but its hard to see some of the detail due to its size--maybe choose some more obvious forms?
don't take any of this as law, btw, this is a really quick look