i find the dark outline throws the look slightly. the hair on our right is slightly confusing at the moment. the strands/clumps/blobs at the back (as far as I can tell by the root positioning) seem to advance to the viewer more than the fringe area, the reverse of what I think you were aiming for. this can be fixed by making the shadow contours more convex. this problem was actually worsened in mr. andy trans edit. i believe there is too much shadowing under the right manboob (his left), maybe there should be even less than the other side. is the portrait of any one in particular? if so, they should leave their shirt on.