I feel like you're working within a very small range of line weight.
I'd suggest to use a process that leans towards more line and less paint in the early stages.
Not only will it help you construct dimensional forms, as wolfenoctis has done quite nicely.
It will also help you integrate the meaning of the lines from the start.
Use properties of the lines to have greater affect on how it is viewed.
Your piece can also benefit from line interaction.
Most of the lines you've put down don't touch, and exist within their own space.
Use overlapping lines to show forms, space, weight, direction,etc.
I don't have time to do an edit on your piece.
Here's an art I've been working on that applies what I'm saying:
You don't have to have such a high range of weight.
But start with construction and line purpose.
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