Bubbles competition: The last breath (Need heavy critics to win !)

[Arylic]

Hey everyone. This week i am entering the competition with a style and i need to work on my artwork before deadline and win  :Dat least 3rd place . I need you guys help to help me in every step i take in the development . So here is my work in progress 1 from line art.


   

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Hopefully i can win this if i work hard and straight for 6 days remaining. 

[NaCl]

He needs more chin. It is too thin (from the front of the chin to the back of the jaw). Try googling some pictures of people in profile and seeing how far back their chin goes.

[Arylic]

I didn't get what you said...   can you explain in brief please.

[Jim16]

I agree with Salty, Your understanding of facial anatomy, has lead to the head being to small. Go find a reference..! And don't expect to win competitions at this moment if time..Those people have been pixel artists for allot longer than you have and so know more, do more and get a better finished result. But you have the right mind set to get far 

So find a reference and fix fix fix those line art problems before you get to far.

[Arylic]

Ok i did some improvements and here is my base colour w.i.p 2.

[NaCl]

I would consider working much more in the line art before coloring if you want to try and win. I quickly edited the face so that the ear was in the correct position, and sloppily drew a jaw just to show you what I mean in my first post. Remember that the distance from the inside of the eye to the chin, is the same as the distance from the outside of the eye to the back of the ear.

[Arylic]

Now the the boy looks all odd and funny....lol....but ill improve a bit on the chin and the ears.

[Kazuya Mochu]

the eye looks like its in front view. you should adjust it to profile view

[Dr D]

I think all of your pieces suffer from jagginess. It looks like you're using the line tool to draw everything, I really don't recommend this. Draw everything pixel-by-pixel, unless it really is straight, sharp, and/or mechanical. Not like a human face.

[Arylic]

Little update.