*loves being able to understand what Helm said thanks to all the reading he's been doing*
Hi Atrophy. Looks like a big improvement to me.
The proportions seem off to me when compared to the photo, though. I think your hair is a tad taller (~ one and a half nose-bridge heights, from bridge), shading between the nose/cheek may be too gentle, worth a couple pixels less hair next to the eye on the right, and your chin perhaps should be a little shorter (not the same length as your nose to bridge) and the cleft less emphasized.
That's at a glance, anyway - compared not to Helm's edit but the original photo, you've elongated your face & caricaturized your chin.