Looks much better. A few issues
- The light source isn't really clear. All the major spheres (including the eye) indicate different light sources. The teeth are darker on all sides, like some form of pillowshading.
- The design itself could be improved a bit, I think. In the original sketch, there was a bigger sphere behind the body of the ship, like a spider's abdomen. It made the ship more interesting.
- Is the eye supposed to be able to look ahead of the ship? Because now the whole ship looks very flat indeed, and the eyeball is on a flat surface between a ring of spheres, being unable to look anywhere but directly above the ship. Was that intentional? If you want the eye to be able to see where the ship is going, then you need to slope the center mass of the ship, like a hill. And if you just intend the eyeball to rest on a flat surface like a meatball on a pizza, then you have to make sure that it's in a top down perspective, like the rest of the ship.