And this is first more or less detailed draft:
Mind if I also nag you about that bike? For some reason I really want to see the bike where it is in your draft here. I think it adds a lot more and somehow makes me feel the depth and scale of this space, and the dude's place in it, which is a much cooler feeling than I get with the bike in its current position. I don't know enough about composition for this to mean anything, but: