C64 ALFI, 2 colours per 8x1, 16 colours to use, I used 15, yadda yadda...
I'm a little frightened to do this, seeing as how I've never edited a member's work, who's 10X more technical than I. Just want to let you know beforehand, that I probably broke a shister load of the general restrictions you were working under, however I felt these problems, imo, needed to be addressed.
I felt that your version was great technically, but some parts of the face felt sorta' strange, in terms of the general female. For one, she had a real dominant upper lip, almost swollen, in fact. It kinda looked like some of the people you see on t.v. who get collagen injections in thier lips. Just...unnatural. The moon seems to come from the left, so I just flipped the majority of the shine on the bottom lip the opposite side. No biggie. Oh, I thought when people smiled, or smirked, the skin of the lips stretched thinner(Is this wrong?)? Also, her eyes were sorta bugging out. With a serene scene such as this, I felt a slight, narrow set of eyes, and visible lashes would seem more inviting to the viewer, as well as seductive.(though I'm pretty sure you were going for the friendly look). I also tweaked the nose, and shortened the chin, as it was kinda' elongated, and dominant, much like a male's. I messed with the moon, but to honest, I really didn't have a problem with the original. Was just bored...
Again, I apologize for killing the restrictions. I just thought some parts seemed strange...Still, better than I could ever pull off, seeing as how I've never tried it out before...
P.S. Fear The B.O.B., killer of restrictions, style, and breaker of perspectives!
(heh, custom smiley...)