I'm going to have another go at this and I'll follow the advice. Maybe less black outlines, study some anime pictures and yeah, make her hair
look less like palm tree leaves.
Adrias - I think what you say is right, but I've always learnt by copying other peoples stuff rather than doing still life. The chances of me learning how to draw like leonardo da vinci are very small.
Anime is very popular and I totally suck at it. But I'm more interested in game graphics than comic book art and making a game look Japanese might increase its appeal. I read "how to draw comics the marvel way" but a long time ago.
Thanks for criticism guys. I'll post something better when its done!
edit: I redit the portrait after studying the masters ... hehe ... now we know how she lost her eyebrows.