good to see you here, Lackey! the edit is great, in fact the original concept was to be something relatively similar, but I didn't think about it afterwards.
yes, those rails are (or meant to be) further off the wall, and the flag: a little closer. well, I think this is a good lead for me as well as people trying to take something out of this thread. . . I hope they will consequently make things better than me. thanks, I will possibly have some chance to utilize your critique, but not in this piece. anyway, I don't want you to feel that your time was wasted.
you know, there's one rule I'm always trying to keep to: after I decide something is finished I'm not allowing myself to touch it any more, as the progress would lag endlessly. also, trying to learn on my mistakes I don't try to cover them . . . which is how I fight with perfectionism (or the bad side of it).
kudos!