Why are love hearts raining on the emo? no one loves emos! thats why there emo!
*cough* anyway, the main thing i can drew out of Terley's edit is the composition, compare your pictures composition to his. the elements make his more centered, focused and interesting e.g. the dark and lightness of the background meeting where the emos face is helps create a focal point. try going through a magazine and looking at the adds and how there composition draws and moves your eye around them.
I end with a quote i saw on a funny T-Shirt
"If being emo makes you happy, somethings wrong"
its funny on 2 levels