I have deleted a few of your posts since your comeback, and the ones in this thread would go if feron hadn't replied to them already. You seem to have been gone enough time to not remember that you should post when you have constructive criticism, not just to post. Please rectify. If you need to talk this over, send me a PM, not in this thread, thanks.
Carrying on with critique:
This is pretty solid. My biggest crit is what is that face doing there? Is it useful, game-wise? Do you need an anime girl there? If you need a character a grizzled mine-sweeper soldier would fit better perhaps? Anything than generic anime girl?