SpooooookyFactoryNight

[IrresponsibleFreelancer]

A worker heard a noise in the factory so he grabbed his gun to check it out.  Once again i would like critiques on my work cuz im new and i dont think it read well where i wanted the two focal points to be the man with the gun and the shadow at the garage door. Thanks

[Decroded]

pose is very stiff.
unnatural and unbalanced way to hold a shotgun.

perspective issues that his head is over the height of lights.
for us to empathize we would be on eye level with him and he could be a touch closer which also gives u more real eatate to add character plus increase his priority.

try increasing saturation on highlights and focal points eg gun guy rim lighting.
I think the door has too much contrast in the grid that makes the widow frames. due to bloom effect there would be less contrast.
its pointless to have bevel on the glass it just takes away.

shadows get softer and less contrasted as they get further away.

[IrresponsibleFreelancer]

I tried doing everything you said and i think it looks about a thousand times better thank you so much for all the help, if there is still more please tell me id love to know   

[Decroded]

as with ur cowboy ur colours are really washed out.
made a few quick changes here...


blue could probably be used more sparingly than my edit but u have too many colours so i couldn't be bothered editing so many.
regardless it still is more interesting than so much grey.

it looks like what youve done here is just picked a colour every time u draw something with very little conservation.
in future try recycling colours to bring harmony to ur scene and only add new colours when u need to.