I'll agree with the other comments about the mountain colour seeming too 'fleshy' and the foliage lacking a chinese feeling. I think also the rocks are a little too distinctively vertical and could use a bit more angular variation.
Oftentimes, you'll see a small pagoda on the side or top of mountains here, (if you ignore the modern day scenic obtrusions such as cell phone antennas, radio masts and weather/wind monitoring equipment)
As for the foliage, it tends to be incredibly dense and very rich green with a lot of fern-like vegetation, many trees tend to have fewer but long, thin and twisty branches with clumps of leaves on them.
Willow pattern is a reasonably good reference but more for chinese art style than actually reflecting nature. Giving the piece a more traditional chinese painting feel to it would be an interesting option and would certainly add to an 'oriental' intention for the piece (inked outlines loosely coloured with watercolours) but that's a complete style change.
A few quick image search links:
清山 方山 大黑山 泰山-Z-
Addendum as the original image has been updated while typing this:
Mountain colour is better, but the greens of the foliage are now too vivid and don't have the lighting variation that the first piece had (which worked well i.m.o) They are also still to regular in their 'clumps' not even changing in size according to depth/distance. Clouds and mist around the top are almost a must, and the rough sketch of them looks good so far. I feel the sky colour clashes a bit with the mountain though. Not sure on intended time of day, but skies (other than in places like 北京 or 上黑 tend to be very clear blue not 'dusty' as the current colour suggests to me.