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Feature 10 - I Move For No Man

on: September 29, 2013, 07:26:27 pm
Hi guys

I want to use this for aa practice. But before I do I would like some critique, specifically about color however any other crits are welcome  :y:
I'ts a poster of the black knight from a Monty Python sketch. As seen here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zKhEw7nD9C4

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Re: I move for no man [WIP]

Reply #1 on: September 29, 2013, 11:06:17 pm
Id try using more contrast on the knight itself.  Since theres high contrast between the knight and the background, the shading on the knight becomes less noticeable.

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Re: I move for no man [WIP]

Reply #2 on: September 29, 2013, 11:16:02 pm
And the blue is a little jarring against the red/orange, it might help to tone that down a bit.

Literally like a 10 second edit, just purpled and desaturated-

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Re: I move for no man [WIP]

Reply #3 on: September 29, 2013, 11:28:24 pm
His shoulders and his waist seem disproportionate to me.

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Re: I move for no man [WIP]

Reply #4 on: September 30, 2013, 05:25:54 am
Thanks for the critique  :y:

I've desaturated the blue, increased contrast and made the hips a bit wider, anything else?



Edit: removed some old color pixels on his helm
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Re: I move for no man [WIP]

Reply #5 on: September 30, 2013, 08:46:07 am
His legs seem splayed outwards from the knees in an odd way. Like this:
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You should probably widen the skirt, spread the legs more. I also feel like they should be longer.

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Re: I move for no man [WIP]

Reply #6 on: September 30, 2013, 09:08:52 am
maybe you also find a solution with the red bg to make it with clean lines (2:1, 3:1, 4:1 ratios). Otherwise it might get difficult to AA them and it definitely will take away from the clean style you have going on in the foreground.

Is the sword intended to be a yellow shape or is it just WIP?
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Re: I move for no man [WIP]

Reply #7 on: September 30, 2013, 10:02:05 am
The sword is going to just be a yellow shape, the whole thing is just to practice AA, I'l try your suggestion of clean lines after I fail to make these current lines work  ;D

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Re: I move for no man [WIP]

Reply #8 on: September 30, 2013, 11:28:02 am
Widened the legs, and made them slightly thinner and moved the knee up a bit, does this look better Larwick?

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Re: I move for no man [WIP]

Reply #9 on: September 30, 2013, 01:08:04 pm
Yeah that's better, the raised knees helps a lot. I did a paint-over and think the knees may be more visible where the skirt ends however.