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[GIF]Breathing Guy

on: February 11, 2010, 04:08:01 am
Something about this seems off, but I can't quite tell what.

His right arm has crystals growing out of it, like rock candy.
The part I'm having trouble with is the breathing animation. Something doesn't look right. What should I change, if anything?
« Last Edit: February 11, 2010, 04:09:45 am by Chrispy »

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Re: [GIF]Breathing Guy

Reply #1 on: February 11, 2010, 08:51:30 am
You don't breathe with your legs now do you :)

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Re: [GIF]Breathing Guy

Reply #2 on: February 11, 2010, 10:20:16 am
 ???
Lots of things seem off with this piece. Pixels are moving all over the place, and his rocky arm is unreadable as such (too thin and messy).
Even when parts of his body aren't moving, highlights and shadows are moving around, and hiding whatever animation is underneath. Why the hell does the highlight on his head need to move?

It looks like he's doing pelvic thrusts. I mean, what situation will he be in? A brawler? A platformer? It seems you can't decide whether to have him just breathing casually or in a "ready to kick your ass" pose.

I think you need to redo this.
http://www.gas13.ru/v3/tutorials/sywtbapa_breathing_life_into_sprites.php
It seems this could help you.

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Re: [GIF]Breathing Guy

Reply #3 on: February 11, 2010, 12:48:54 pm
???
Lots of things seem off with this piece. Pixels are moving all over the place, and his rocky arm is unreadable as such (too thin and messy).
Even when parts of his body aren't moving, highlights and shadows are moving around, and hiding whatever animation is underneath. Why the hell does the highlight on his head need to move?

It looks like he's doing pelvic thrusts. I mean, what situation will he be in? A brawler? A platformer? It seems you can't decide whether to have him just breathing casually or in a "ready to kick your ass" pose.

I think you need to redo this.
http://www.gas13.ru/v3/tutorials/sywtbapa_breathing_life_into_sprites.php
It seems this could help you.

He's trying to do sub pixel animation but it seems he's over doing it and combine that with the low readability of the piece...well it just makes it a bit too messy.  I wish I could help with the animation but I don't even know how to do sub pixel animations yet.

My advice is to look at Konjaks animations he uses sub pixeling a lot!  Oh and Super Metroid, Samus' idle sprite is sub pixeling I think.

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Re: [GIF]Breathing Guy

Reply #4 on: February 11, 2010, 08:32:10 pm

Is that better? I toned down the motion and redid the shading on the arm.

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Re: [GIF]Breathing Guy

Reply #5 on: February 11, 2010, 10:35:44 pm
I actually thought the whole shimmery thing, while technically incorrect, made for an interesting effect.
The edit's better, but now it's too stiff. Have his head bob up and down a bit like before, though not with the random pixels running around, and maybe get his arms moving around just a little.
What if you made the crystals on his hand a little bigger?
« Last Edit: February 12, 2010, 02:49:05 am by Chis »

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Re: [GIF]Breathing Guy

Reply #6 on: February 12, 2010, 02:44:37 am
It looks like his body is throbbing, instead of looking like he is breathing.
The stomach should move less, and the upper body should move more.
Try taking a deep breath and think about how your body is moving.

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Re: [GIF]Breathing Guy

Reply #7 on: February 13, 2010, 09:06:26 pm

I have 2 versions here because I felt the head bob looked weird but without it it's too stiff. I'm posting both to see which one you guys like better or which changes I should make to which one to make it look fine.