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The Hidden Passage[WIP]

on: November 01, 2009, 07:20:59 pm
I'm sick, so started on some pixel piece to pass the time.

28 colours so far, not planning on passing 32.





Comments and critique apreciated.
« Last Edit: November 02, 2009, 03:16:17 pm by Opacus »

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Re: The Hidden Passage[WIP]

Reply #1 on: November 01, 2009, 07:39:18 pm
Why not put the focus on one interesting aspect, using those 4 colors?

This seems to get a beautiful scene, why not make it beautiful and interesting? ;)

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Re: The Hidden Passage[WIP]

Reply #2 on: November 01, 2009, 07:49:09 pm
I like this especially the second layer, but there's something about the water that's not right, try desaturating it slightly or add some red in the hues. The foreground seems too saturated compared to the rest, maybe try and add a layer or desaturating it or saturate the rest. Anyway, I'll be checking for updates!
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Re: The Hidden Passage[WIP]

Reply #3 on: November 02, 2009, 01:32:16 pm
Thanks for the comment.

Lollige: Yeah, I plan on making the fisherman the focusing point, but he doesn't stand out enough. Though a bright colour could work, would it fit on a traditional japanese fisherman?
And cheers, man :)

Chris2balls:
Thanks man. I think you're on to something there with the layers. I think it's the second layer that's too desatured compared to the first, rather than the first being to satured compared to the though.
And the water's still very W.I.P, I'll do something about that soon.

Here's an update:

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Re: The Hidden Passage[WIP]

Reply #4 on: November 02, 2009, 01:39:43 pm
What fisherman?

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Re: The Hidden Passage[WIP]

Reply #5 on: November 02, 2009, 01:42:05 pm
What fisherman?

Between the 2 rocks.
Guess it's worse than I thought.

(By the way, might wanna steer clear of one liners. They don't take too kindly to one lines here)

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Re: The Hidden Passage[WIP]

Reply #6 on: November 02, 2009, 01:52:12 pm
Hey, just a small edit and color variations i tried

the first one is the original of you
the 6 below are the edits



oh and also:

i made the fisherman so, that he's driving the opposite direction now, as i made a second layer ( small waterfall as passage)
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Re: The Hidden Passage[WIP]

Reply #7 on: November 02, 2009, 01:54:15 pm
It is quite obvious which fisherman :p

How about moving the image a bit to the right, to get a more interesting composition? And instead of going brighter, you could also give him a red suit. That could work quite realistically, and it defenitely makes him stand out...
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Oh, and also, you might want to play with the angles of your waterfalls. It would be strange if they were all pointed to the camera, and it especially annoys me on the middle one of the set on the left.

Quick NPA composition edit:



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Re: The Hidden Passage[WIP]

Reply #8 on: November 02, 2009, 01:57:46 pm
Lollige is right, a nice composition lies in those that avoid geometric shapes or everything else that is in order...
saying that all the waterfalls you have right now go like this


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Re: The Hidden Passage[WIP]

Reply #9 on: November 02, 2009, 02:01:05 pm
NOOOOoO :'( :'( :'( :-[
Edit your post before Skamocore or Jalonso or Metaru gets to see it!


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You can actually lower the horizon even more if you want to:


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