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Re: Hide and Seek [WIP]

Reply #10 on: December 27, 2008, 05:38:50 am


Update, started workin' a bit on the water, and changed some of the things you mentioned, 32. C+C!

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Re: Hide and Seek [WIP]

Reply #11 on: December 27, 2008, 04:23:00 pm
If the scene is only lit by the light of the moon then the rocks are lit wrongly in that they look lit from something in front of the tree. I think they could do with being darker and casting a shadow over the ground boy, which would make the scene seem more 'dark' (in mood) as well.

Hope that helps! :)

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Re: Hide and Seek [WIP]

Reply #12 on: December 27, 2008, 08:33:27 pm
Just adding on to that- Most of the scene is lit either too brightly, or from the wrong side, if it's being lit by the moon. The grass behind the rock, for instance, would catch little to no light, as the rocks are obstructing it from the light.

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Re: Hide and Seek [WIP]

Reply #13 on: December 27, 2008, 08:35:54 pm
Being able to see just the top row of teeth without the mouth opened, partially or otherwise, makes it feel a bit like a child's drawing I feel. I think you should either have both rows of teeth protruding or open the mouth to expose the top row, which would probably make the lizard look much more threatening.

This is showing a lot of improvement already, keep at it.

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Re: Hide and Seek [WIP]

Reply #14 on: December 27, 2008, 11:33:20 pm
Personally i think there's too much light on the boy, especially his left leg and the grass on which he's standing.  After all in the shadow of rocks the moonlight shouldn't be strong enough

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Re: Hide and Seek [WIP]

Reply #15 on: December 28, 2008, 04:38:20 am


Here's an update with added darkness and more shadows. Keep going?

Thanks for the C+C guys!

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Re: Hide and Seek [WIP]

Reply #16 on: December 28, 2008, 05:02:17 am
Maybe it's just me, but I think the darker version might be a bit TOO dark. I'd say bring out the highlights more.
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Re: Hide and Seek [WIP]

Reply #17 on: December 28, 2008, 05:11:28 am
the grass looks mad sketchy still my dude. try to clean it up. also, his right arm looks like its bent backwards and folded out... its really weird. now about the colors... this is at night, and you cant see that well at night... you would NOT see all those bright colors! you can have the colors there, but try making them a tiny bit more saturated and make their shadows bluer, cause the light that you're getting is from the dark blue sky.

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Re: Hide and Seek [WIP]

Reply #18 on: December 28, 2008, 05:49:27 am
Obviously the grass isn't done, dude

And the lightest parts are basically where the light would hit them from what I see, thanks though

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Re: Hide and Seek [WIP]

Reply #19 on: December 28, 2008, 05:54:38 am
Darker version is looking much better, it's starting to have a lot more atmosphere. =)

I'm having trouble empathising with the character at the moment. I assume you want this kid to be scared. But at the moment it just looks like he's got his mouth open. An edit:



Why 56 colours? =/