AuthorTopic: [WIP] RPG Girl (Update! 5/15)  (Read 30906 times)

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Re: [WIP] RPG Girl

Reply #30 on: March 08, 2008, 11:40:47 am
hello, I have critique for you.

First of all, it's a very nice sprite, it has character! And a good color selection I didn't mess with very much.

I'd like you to consider what you're gaining from using selout. Here is your sprite over a dark background and a light background, tell me if you think the gains from the dark meshing outweigh the damage of it over a lighter environ



I think you could stand to lose the selout. Then I did a lot of minor edits here and there which would take an age to type out and I'm really really tired and should sleep. What I would suggest you do is take my version and put it side to side to yours in your editing program and move the colors around and see where I've reused colors or added colors or changed huges from yours to mine. If the reason for doing something isn't readily apparent, ask me and I'll tell  you why I did what I did.

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Re: [WIP] RPG Girl

Reply #31 on: March 08, 2008, 11:48:00 am
I just tried striking the pose in Helm's edit and it really didn't feel great; not a pose anyone would strike naturally imo. I don't think her left leg needs moving any.

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Re: [WIP] RPG Girl

Reply #32 on: March 11, 2008, 02:23:10 pm
Correct me if I'm wrong, but I believe Helm moved the feet cause her knees are apparently bent inwards under that skirt.
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Re: [WIP] RPG Girl

Reply #33 on: March 11, 2008, 07:47:58 pm
In Helm's edit it seems as though the skirt is too flat, and I'm not sure if the skirt should be that reflective of light - it looks a bit like plastic. I like Helm's upper body and I Am Uh's lower body.  :)

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Re: [WIP] RPG Girl

Reply #34 on: March 26, 2008, 05:23:38 am
Update!

>>>>>

The skirt still needs work..... [Blech, I think I made it worse.... the skirt I mean! ;)]
« Last Edit: March 26, 2008, 10:27:00 pm by tehwexxl0rz »

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Re: [WIP] RPG Girl

Reply #35 on: March 26, 2008, 10:15:30 pm
You actually made it better.  :)

I like the tiny bit of saturation you added.

The outstretched hand still doesn't look right. It's because all the fingers are the same length, when they really shouldn't be.

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Re: [WIP] RPG Girl

Reply #36 on: March 26, 2008, 10:33:10 pm
You actually made it better.  :)

I like the tiny bit of saturation you added.

The outstretched hand still doesn't look right. It's because all the fingers are the same length, when they really shouldn't be.

Thanks! I like the new pallet a lot better. I was really just referring to the skirt... what with the massive highlight blob.... *clarified*

Hmm.... I like the hand in general, but I know you're right. I'll see what I can do....

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Re: [WIP] RPG Girl

Reply #37 on: March 27, 2008, 12:40:07 am
Update!



Hand is less like a spatula. :P
« Last Edit: May 09, 2008, 09:36:18 pm by tehwexxl0rz »

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Re: [WIP] RPG Girl

Reply #38 on: May 10, 2008, 12:07:00 am
UPDATE! So I decided this wasn't finished after all....

>>>

Changed the hair, changed the skirt, got rid of some selout, fixed the hand, edited the boots, and made her legs one pixel shorter.

The highlights on the skirt are still a MESS though, and I can't for the life of me make them look decent. :(

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Re: [WIP] RPG Girl

Reply #39 on: May 10, 2008, 08:22:54 am
I took a crack at the dress:



I think your light blue is a little too contrasted with the next darker blue. Its hard to add highlights without making it look too shiny.

I think you should pay attention to helm's edit, he did a great job with the colors IMO, though I don't care much for what he did to her left foot.

A couple other critiques...

1. You're brutal with the darker shades outlining just about everything. It works on her hair, but with the boots it makes them look too rounded. Same with the dress and chest.

2. Her left hand is too far toward her midsection to be resting on her hip ( which I guess is what it is doing? ).

3. The boots look like stool legs, they need to be tweaked so they have more perspective.
« Last Edit: May 10, 2008, 08:35:06 am by EvilEye »