[WIP] Zack be asplorin for tresur

[1up]

Thought I'd make a topic here for some advice on how to improve this, since that's virtually impossible to get at PT :U

[Sherman Gill]

The hair looks separated from the head, and, at first glance, to be part of the jacket.
What's with the variable line width Just doing it for the hell of it? You could make it better, IMO, by making the thinnest parts coincide with the parts most effected by the lightsource.

Besides that, looks good. Original character design?

[cerealkiller54]

The hair looks separated from the head, and, at first glance, to be part of the jacket.
What's with the variable line width Just doing it for the hell of it? You could make it better, IMO, by making the thinnest parts coincide with the parts most effected by the lightsource.

Besides that, looks good. Original character design?

Not origional. Is from Zack and Wiki.
Anyway, the eyes are WAY too far apart.