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Longship

on: February 17, 2008, 09:49:14 am
This is a W.I.P I've had for a while now, just started working on it again. Its a longship, and I'd like some advice on maybe where I should go from here since I'm just completely clueless. As always crits are more than welcome.
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Re: Longship

Reply #1 on: February 17, 2008, 10:30:53 am
Hmm, it looks good so far. I'm thinking it could use a horizon and sky though to finish it off.

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Re: Longship

Reply #2 on: February 17, 2008, 04:15:56 pm
A mistake is a mistake.
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The same mistake three or more times is a motif.

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Re: Longship

Reply #3 on: February 17, 2008, 06:08:01 pm
Thanks  Guys, U'mm yeah I planned on making a horizon and yes Adarias I've seen the thread.... (Come to think of it, thats probably where I got the original idea.)

Well here's a small Update.

I took the A.A a bit further.
I also added a horizon line, not sure I'm satisfied with where it's at though. Might change it.
« Last Edit: February 17, 2008, 06:09:52 pm by I Am Uh »
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Re: Longship

Reply #4 on: February 17, 2008, 06:09:55 pm
The top sail hole looks irregular since it should be light blue like the sky, since the horizon is lower then the top sail hole.
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Re: Longship

Reply #5 on: February 17, 2008, 06:16:15 pm
I thought the boat looked really odd like half of it was in a different view than the other half. So i did a quick edit to make it look like it was all in the same perspective.  Idk if it is something you want to change because of this pieces cartoony style but if it is this might help.




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Re: Longship

Reply #6 on: February 17, 2008, 06:24:24 pm
Thanks Mattpk, I probably would've never spotted that otherwise.
Well Phlox, the original idea was to make the boat to be hitting the waves at an angle, so that it appeared slightly curved. I'm thinking about possibly making a large wave behind it. (If I can figure out what it supposed look like... Lol.)
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Re: Longship

Reply #7 on: February 17, 2008, 08:55:58 pm
The sail looks like we're getting the head-on view, while the boat is unmistakably at an angle (which I guess is fine, it doesn't have to face the same way, just though it might look better if it did).  Your water looks pointy and sharp, I'd try to make it seem a little more fluid.
Oh, and add vikings.  Wonderful, bearded, historically incorrect, possibly anachronistic vikings.

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Re: Longship

Reply #8 on: February 17, 2008, 10:00:20 pm
Viking ships were made of planks whereas the way you have shaded it suggests its made of something else. They also had a dragon on the front and that mast looks really thick. Maybe get a reference.
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Re: Longship

Reply #9 on: February 18, 2008, 02:38:19 am
Cool boat with an awesome sail. But yeah, it should be angled. Also I think the mast of the boat would be longer and further out of the water at an angle (it's sort of 90 to the center line at the bottom of the boat.)

Check out some of these longboats, the mast is curvier and has a masthead:

http://vikingships.tripod.com/images/rigging1a.jpg
http://www.cinemastrikesback.com/news/reviews/tarkan/longboat.jpg
http://chromatism.net/current/images/northmen/longboat.jpg

Longboat is long...

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Re: Longship

Reply #10 on: February 18, 2008, 03:17:35 am
Thanks for everyone's comments. I tried to fix the sail and make it more angled. (Tell me if it still doesn't look right.) As far as the wooden planks on the boat go Sharprm, I'm not sure if they work out the way they should.

Original Reference: http://www.dailygalaxy.com/photos/uncategorized/2007/06/29/viking_longship_3.jpg

Edit, I've never really worked with water much so I'm gonna' need some help here.
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Re: Longship

Reply #11 on: February 18, 2008, 05:38:44 am
Already looking ten times awesomer!  ;D

As for water, your best bet is just to look at normal water and practice with that. Also check the way the shadows and ocean spray in the water are done in the thread linked to earlier, or experiment a bit and do your own thing.

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Re: Longship

Reply #12 on: February 18, 2008, 02:03:59 pm
I've decided I don't want to destroy my decent ship with my horrible water. :P So I think this is gonna be my final version unless you think there's anything else that needs to be done. 15 Colors Inc. transparency
« Last Edit: February 18, 2008, 02:13:34 pm by I Am Uh »
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They say evil prevails when good men fail to act. What they oughta' say is...
Evil prevails.
 - Yuri Orlov, (Nicholas Cage) "Lord of War"
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Mother is God in the eyes of a Child...  - Rose Da Silva (Radha Mitchell) "Silent Hill"