[newbie] Baby

[arfalas]

Today I've taken some passport pictures of a baby whom inspired me to draw this:



His eyes were so wide open that I think they were about to jump out from his eye sockets 

As usual, be rough with C+C! 

edit ( asymmetric shadows):

[lilwing]

Ick! Horrible color combination. Go for something a little more neutral, maybe a duller yellow-green.

[Rydin]

I think the colors are fine...I love how much you simplify and symbolize...you're on to something very neat.

Right now, the lighting, or lack thereof, is killing the piece.

Here's a lame attempt to show what I mean:

Really all I did what change how it was lit.

With more dynamic and less symmetrical lighting, you can bring out the shapes and intricacies of the face.

[arfalas]

Thank you both for your help!

@lilwing: About the color combination, I have chosen the green palette in order to strenghten the symbolic meaning of the piece. 

@rydin: Thanks  Major issue: the lighting, as usual! Actually I am quite interested in it (as wannabe photographer, you know) and found your attempt so much useful!
Here I am working on the symmetrical istance:



Have a wonderful day 

[mattpk]

Study the cheek bone shading (the shade below the eyes) that you see in rydin's attempt. 

[arfalas]

mattpk, here:



I've edited the cheek bone shading and the chin shading. 


Now, about editing the first post with up-to-date images:

Is it better adding to the post every substantial change in my piece?
Or just reply to the last answer?
Who knows 

[mattpk]

It looks better, but for omse reason there is a line over the mouth that looks to me like a moustache. 

[arfalas]

It seems I have got a problemi with the mouth 

Actually this is the element's order, from  bottom to top:

chin shadow (shadow green)
chin (black)
lower lip (shadow green)
lips (black)
upper lip (shadow green)

So, the mouth is not well readable 

quick fix (black pixel added-center of the mouth line):

[lilwing]

I wouldn't say the combination is necessarily bad, but rather that bright green. I still stand by my earlier opinion, since that color is very unnatural.

[arfalas]

I wouldn't say the combination is necessarily bad, but rather that bright green. I still stand by my earlier opinion, since that color is very unnatural.

@lilwing
 is unnatural = bad? My intent was to draw an odd baby staring eyes wide open at you. Do you think that a pink, cute w.a.s.p. baby
(or greenish-yellow, as you say) works better at that than a freaky, green-coloured one camed from my warped mind? 

Here lies an update (worked on chin shading, as you can see):