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[Rydin]

The poorly executed shading and harsh dark outlines are killing your piece man.  Instead of pillow shading, with a light source from directly in front of the object, try moving the light source into a corner.  Deeper values would really help establish depth, too.  And the dark outlines...maybe something more subtle might help?

Good luck man.

[JonathanOfDrain]

I need to agree with Rydin on this one. In an attempt to make this make a little more sense I made a poor edit! Sorry I only did a little bit of the phone, really want to do more but I think this will do for now.
Yours << - >> Mine


Smoothing the lines out was my main priority. Black is not longer as ummm black I guess, I softened it to a very dark grey (9 luma). I think I dropped one or two colors. gave the numbers 1, 4 and 7 some shape with highlights and some shading. Try to take what you can from this shoddy edit. Please keep us posted with your progress, I'd love to see you apply things you learn from this edit to the MEGA item.

[Hideo]

sorry, i do not understand all
need more shading and blur ?

the new version


i tnink phone is done

[JonathanOfDrain]

You need to smooth out those black lines. This doesn't mean make them look more blurry. The black line doesn't have to be everywhere to still be seen as a line. Look at my edit, see on the light part of the phone how the lines are broken almost? They aren't always directly connected. This called anti aliasing, for a better explanation of what it is and how to use it effectively go here.
Remember for this piece (the phone) the light is coming from the top right.

[Hideo]

update
check previous post

[smiker]

lacks antialiasing man, anyway the mobile has something to do with brightness and cntrast...

[JonathanOfDrain]

lacks antialiasing man, anyway the mobile has something to do with brightness and cntrast...

Lacks AA (like I've shown in my edits) and suffers from pillow shading. I think the brightness could be changed but the contrast is fine since the colors are really good for AAing.
Hideo, please examine that edit of mine and get rid of all that pillow shading.

[Hideo]

maybe this ?
sorry i dont understand some phrases in English. What this - pillow shading ?