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Hamma' Time :// finished

on: December 19, 2007, 10:14:49 am
Some pixel doodles haha. I was in the mood to draw animals. Critique is welcomed but be nice xD



I'll probably add some more later :)

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Re: Hamma' Time (doodlez)

Reply #1 on: December 19, 2007, 03:49:13 pm
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Re: Hamma' Time (doodlez)

Reply #2 on: December 19, 2007, 04:53:35 pm
They are cute!
You should add some AA on the black outlines.
The black border between the girafe's head and its neck seems a bit wreid. Maybe replace the black color with a brown one. :)

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Re: Hamma' Time (doodlez)

Reply #3 on: December 19, 2007, 05:07:17 pm
@Pickspsy: oh the head looks much better like that xD. and you're right I'll add more colours

@swordsman: well..the line is mostly brown already haha, but i understand what you mean.

I'll make some edit later
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Re: Hamma' Time (doodlez)

Reply #4 on: December 21, 2007, 12:00:54 am
wip #2 :

added more colours + knife wielding flamingo

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Re: Hamma' Time (doodlez)

Reply #5 on: December 21, 2007, 01:24:48 am
DELICIOUS COLORS!  ;D

My biggest concern right now is the crunchy outlines.  I mean, I really dig the fact that they are purple, but they just feel "messy" right now, you know?
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Re: Hamma' Time (doodlez)

Reply #6 on: December 21, 2007, 03:27:26 am
DELICIOUS COLORS!  ;D

My biggest concern right now is the crunchy outlines.  I mean, I really dig the fact that they are purple, but they just feel "messy" right now, you know?

hahaha crunchy xD

I'll work on the outlines :)
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Re: Hamma' Time (doodlez)

Reply #7 on: December 21, 2007, 07:44:10 am



update :3. I coloured the flamingo

uhh i changed the liens some too. probably not any better but i'm working on it i guess lol x__x.


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decided i might join the latest PJ challenge if i can get it done in time haha

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #8 on: December 23, 2007, 04:40:53 am
FWIW, I don't think a messy finish is necessarily a bad thing. Cartoony styles like what you're doing now can work quite well with it. Also, I love your outrageously neon color pallete. One thing that bothers me is that is seems like you are moving away from your own style with the flamingo. Its proportions aren't deformed like the frog's and the giraffe's, and it's making the style look inconsistent. Also the shade of pink you chose isn't burning my eyes enough, make it hotter. :)

Edit: One more thing: I think it would totally look cooler if the flamingo was holding his knife with its raised foot.
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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #9 on: December 23, 2007, 06:28:15 am
FWIW, I don't think a messy finish is necessarily a bad thing. Cartoony styles like what you're doing now can work quite well with it. Also, I love your outrageously neon color pallete. One thing that bothers me is that is seems like you are moving away from your own style with the flamingo. Its proportions aren't deformed like the frog's and the giraffe's, and it's making the style look inconsistent. Also the shade of pink you chose isn't burning my eyes enough, make it hotter. :)

Edit: One more thing: I think it would totally look cooler if the flamingo was holding his knife with its raised foot.

hmm on my screen the pink looks relatively the same in it's..uh...neonness.. xD haha. I'll try adjusting the saturation on my next update.  As for the flamingo itself..well it's a bird..and most birds in general don't really get fat..let alone flamingos LOL .i wasnt going to give it a beer gut and belly button which is really what is making the other two seem so similar i guess. That's how i see it anyways. I'm not sure how i could change the flamingo to 'match' better as you suggest :).

Although it would certainly be amusing to see a flamingo holding a knife by it's foot, i dont think it would be practical for game play..how would he attack+move at the same time? XD Poor Larry would be making himself a gimp! haha


anyways here's an update :)



I don't really like the character stats but i can't think of anything else -_-;

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #10 on: December 24, 2007, 12:02:09 pm
thinking about a longer animation sequence starting with the title screen and moving past character selection



wip of title screen

EDIT://

General idea

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #11 on: December 24, 2007, 01:51:12 pm
Their hands and feet are tiny. I think their limbs might get lost in any details on the ground, so I'd make them a bit easier to see, and I think the dryer should be bigger since it's an important item (more than the bow) and the frog's hammer is much bigger. Also, the tent in the title screen looks a bit flat. Try darkening the sides so that it'll look more cylindrical. The top looks nice, though. :)

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #12 on: December 24, 2007, 05:01:12 pm
The inside of the tent doesn't read as the inside of a tent.  I thought I was seeing through it into space, since space is the same color.

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #13 on: December 24, 2007, 05:23:30 pm
Their hands and feet are tiny. I think their limbs might get lost in any details on the ground, so I'd make them a bit easier to see, and I think the dryer should be bigger since it's an important item (more than the bow) and the frog's hammer is much bigger. Also, the tent in the title screen looks a bit flat. Try darkening the sides so that it'll look more cylindrical. The top looks nice, though. :)

Yeah I agree the the dryer is a bit small haha I'll try and size it up some more. I'm not too too worried about their limbs being small..it's just kind of the chibi style i was going for i guess. I'll try giving one of them bigger limbs and see if i like it though :)

Oh and you're right, i've fixed the tent now haha (not uploaded tho)

The inside of the tent doesn't read as the inside of a tent.  I thought I was seeing through it into space, since space is the same color.

any suggestions on how to make that look better?

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #14 on: December 24, 2007, 05:30:34 pm
Oops.  :-X

I suggest a more gradual transition from the planet color to the purple, like this:

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #15 on: December 24, 2007, 05:58:16 pm
ahh you're right that looks much better, I'll give it a shot :) thanks!
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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #16 on: December 25, 2007, 12:41:19 pm
I finally found the time to make an edit of the giraffe, so here are a few suggestions. I'm sure a lot of it's just a matter of personal preference, but maybe it'll give you some ideas. :)

First of all, I think it's off balance. Centering the neck and head more makes the pose less dynamic, but I don't think you have much of a choice with tiny legs and feet close together. It would either need bigger feet or longer legs.

I didn't think the brown you're using as an outline works very well. I'd use solid purple for the parts in shadow and the darkest color from the animal on the brighter parts. Mixing two contrasting colors like that just makes it look muddled.

I also think cleaning up the outlines would be a good idea.

I experimented with the limbs a bit and tried to keep the tiny legs while giving them some more "filling" rather than being mostly just outlines.

The arm around the dryer looks weird. It's not really holding it, just placed on top of it.

The highlights on the head are pure white without the buffer shade you're using on the stomach. There's also a shade of orange you're not using elsewhere around the mouth. I removed it and added another shade to the dryer to make it fit more with the rest.

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #17 on: December 26, 2007, 04:51:57 pm
heey awesome, thanks for the edit and critique :). I've bene workingon the animation so i've not had time to go back tothe characters yte but I'll be doing that next haha



heres an update



need to do:
-loop animation somehow
-go back to characters and make edits

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #18 on: December 26, 2007, 06:10:56 pm
Quote from: Arachne

First of all, I think it's off balance. Centering the neck and head more makes the pose less dynamic, but I don't think you have much of a choice with tiny legs and feet close together. It would either need bigger feet or longer legs.


you're right it's a bit off balance haha. I've moved the head to the right a few pixels and added in bigger feet


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I didn't think the brown you're using as an outline works very well. I'd use solid purple for the parts in shadow and the darkest color from the animal on the brighter parts. Mixing two contrasting colors like that just makes it look muddled.

hmm..well the brown was used in order to keep colour count down. It was taken form the frog and is also used on the flamingo. I'm not sure what you mean by contrasting colours haha. On my screen they look find x__x;. I'm pretty sure my colours are okay too as i've checked calibration before and it was okay. The colour you used in the edit i think is just too light aswell. If I can find another colour that i'm already using somewhere that will work better I'll do it though :)


Quote from: Arachne
I experimented with the limbs a bit and tried to keep the tiny legs while giving them some more "filling" rather than being mostly just outlines.

The arm around the dryer looks weird. It's not really holding it, just placed on top of it.
I think it's just that its so small that it looks like that.  hopefully i've remedies the issue


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The highlights on the head are pure white without the buffer shade you're using on the stomach. There's also a shade of orange you're not using elsewhere around the mouth.

ooops haha the lack of buffer on the head highlight was just me forgetting to do it haha. I'll fix that next update



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EDIT:///sorry for the double post x_o I'll merge them into one if need be?
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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #19 on: December 26, 2007, 06:58:25 pm
Frankly, I liked the tiny legs and feet. If you change them though, I'd say go with the middlest of each. (the tapering leg-nubs)
Also, the L in larry is not capitalized...
Unless it's meant to read Iarry.

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #20 on: December 26, 2007, 07:01:18 pm
I liked the teeny legs+feet too i think but i'm not sure haha. I -hate- the leg-nubs tho LOL..they look like amputees to me xD

ohh and yeah..that font has weird capitol L's (i cannot pixel fonts >_<)
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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #21 on: December 27, 2007, 04:29:11 am
I like the tiny legs better on both of them and the tiny dryer. Have you tried putting the neck of the middle giraffe on one with the tiny feet?

You eventually have to make an actual game because it's just wrong to tease us with your mockups. ;)

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #22 on: December 27, 2007, 01:35:21 pm
I havnt put the new neck with the old feet yet i forgot to do that haha. I'll give it a try and see how it looks.

I would love to make a game but i sadly do not code ^^;. I've been approached by a gaming company before but their style was...so much different than mine that i didnt think i could do it.

Oh and o_o...LOL uhh no it was just a name i made up and slapped in there to give it a more authentic look XD


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i cannot for the life of me think of a way to loop this thing >_<. help?

oh and i'm at 33 colours i think (should be anyways) and the limit is 64 so im doin pretty good there i'd say :D *pats self on back*
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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #23 on: December 27, 2007, 04:02:19 pm
Do something simple like fade out to black, and fade back in, or something like that.  its a great way for title screens to loop, looks professional, and takes almost no effort :D
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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #24 on: December 27, 2007, 07:50:17 pm
hows this?

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #25 on: December 27, 2007, 10:02:31 pm
 :y:

I think it works very well with the cartoony feel that this has.
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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #26 on: December 28, 2007, 07:23:48 am
The plain square menu item boxes and "pick a character" box are the only things letting this down.
While they succeed admirably at legibility, they really don't fit in with the colourful rounded cartoonishness of every other element, looking somewhat jarring.

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Re: Hamma' Time :// EDITS

Reply #27 on: December 28, 2007, 01:16:30 pm
The plain square menu item boxes and "pick a character" box are the only things letting this down.
While they succeed admirably at legibility, they really don't fit in with the colourful rounded cartoonishness of every other element, looking somewhat jarring.

should i make them rounded..or..add more detail to them etc? I jut have them as plain boxes b/c i felt making them too detailed would just blend it in too much with whats behind it

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I do believe I'm finished :)

Theres probably still some things that could be fixed, but i'm kinda tired of looking at it right now and i've got some other stuff i need to work on haha.
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