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The Shrimp again

on: December 08, 2007, 08:48:44 pm

need C&C please.
Tell me what you think.
« Last Edit: December 08, 2007, 08:55:23 pm by Panda »

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Re: The Shrimp again

Reply #1 on: December 19, 2007, 05:11:54 pm
Cool!
It's really nice!
But I think it has too low saturation :)
maybe you wanted it like this.
Maybe you shoudl remove the outlines
Oh, you can add some contrais to its tail and body

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Re: The Shrimp again

Reply #2 on: January 16, 2008, 11:20:53 pm
a little update :D

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Re: The Shrimp again

Reply #3 on: January 17, 2008, 12:57:29 am


The background is not mine. I just wanted to see how it looks

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Re: The Shrimp again

Reply #4 on: January 17, 2008, 01:16:45 am
Looks much better on gray background because gray is the ambient color on your shrimp (meaning shadows lean toward gray)
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Re: The Shrimp again

Reply #5 on: January 17, 2008, 05:19:08 am
I must say that I've seen this shrimp so many times in this forum and it keeps getting better and better. I wonder just how many times you're going to make this shrimp.  :P

Seriously though it's looking good. The dithering is a bit much for such a small size I'd say. As others have said it needs some more contrast as well. If you could change the outlines from black to colors more appropriate to what they're outlining that'd look nice too. Once you get all that taken care of, try and change the shading to be not so much of a gradient. For example, the ridges on the back of the shrimp could get darker near the top edge of it instead of maintaining their same color. Your dithering isn't too bad but maybe you should try some anti-aliasing too. It's a far more appealing way to bring things together IMO.

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Re: The Shrimp again

Reply #6 on: January 17, 2008, 03:53:24 pm
I experimented with the colors and tried to add a little antialiasing but I'm not very good at it :(

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Re: The Shrimp again

Reply #7 on: January 18, 2008, 05:10:52 am
Your efforts to AA have just made it look blurry. Try to be more subtle. As it is, it looks like you're trying to be too smooth and just piling AA onto more AA.
Otherwise I agree with Dopp in that this is coming along quite nicely.
The new tail is better, but I liked the blueish light coming from beneath.

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Re: The Shrimp again

Reply #8 on: January 18, 2008, 05:38:39 am
Well the word of the week is banding, and its whats giving your AA a blurred look instead of smoothing like it should.

You want to keep the sharpness that pixelart gives you, don't be afraid to cut into the lines but try keep it as thin as possible as your trying to trick the eye into thinking its smoother than it is.

I'd try AA a single line to the side of this for practice just a small curved bit of linework, but I've made an edit of places here and there anyways to illustrate how I'd go about this.

I've not got anything interesting to type here..

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Re: The Shrimp again

Reply #9 on: January 18, 2008, 12:19:08 pm
Proper AA creates the illusion of subpixel smoothness, it doesn't pile on layers and layers of hugged buffer shades.