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Offline Alucard

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Happy Bird [wip]

on: June 28, 2007, 06:04:02 pm


Yes I know birds have beaks and no teeth but I don't care  :P

I'm obviously going for a cartoony look and I was wondering if my shading is ok the way it is going right now?

C&C please  :)
« Last Edit: July 10, 2007, 11:05:49 pm by Alucard »

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Re: Happy Bird [WIP]

Reply #1 on: June 28, 2007, 06:06:42 pm
I think you can put teeth AND beak, because your work don't look like a bird :/

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Re: Happy Bird [WIP]

Reply #2 on: June 28, 2007, 06:10:50 pm
I'm not getting the shading of the head.  The edge of the shadow should curve the opposite direction of what is currently going on.  Otherwise it looks like his skull has caved in, or he has some sort of oil stain going on.

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Re: Happy Bird [WIP]

Reply #3 on: June 28, 2007, 06:22:41 pm
Lightning fast update!

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Re: Happy Bird

Reply #4 on: June 29, 2007, 02:26:43 am


Complete?

If you see any really major flaws please tell me

C&C please
« Last Edit: July 31, 2007, 12:32:22 am by Alucard »

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Re: Happy Bird

Reply #5 on: June 29, 2007, 03:01:32 am
How about some more feathers, perhaps around the head, to reinforce the bird-ness?

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Re: Happy Bird

Reply #6 on: June 29, 2007, 04:36:09 am
It just doesn't look like a bird.

Not only the beak, but the wings. Shouldn't the wings be on his side? Here, it looks like they're flopped in front of him.
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Re: Happy Bird

Reply #7 on: June 29, 2007, 02:44:13 pm
At first I thought it was a man with bandages around his head..
the middle line that seperates the teeth should be bend a bit.
The beak doesn't look like a beak, the top part looks like a nose and the bottom part doesn't look like anything. I think it would be best to make the beak a bit wider.

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Re: Happy Bird

Reply #8 on: June 30, 2007, 05:32:21 pm
Hi there,

Grinning birds! I love grinning birds, I wonder why they are not used more in cartoons.

I think the current problems here is that there are not enough details that indicate us it is a bird, despite being cartoony.

The first noticeable thing is the lack of a beak, or assumptiosn of it. There needs to be more sorrounding the teeth, even if it is just a little orange here and there so it is kind of implied.

Overall anatomy, many common birds have "fat" bodies (I quote it, because -more often than not- it is just an illussion given by the feathers) and narrow heads, and short legs and long feet.

About shading, there is a lack of a clear light source on the body, while on the head it comes from the top left (from our perspective). I think the colors need a little changes, but I'll let someone more educated on the field explain about it (or point out to arne's art tutorial).

I did a quick dirty job addressing those points, inspired for the most part by Squit from the Goodfeathers. I apologize if it strayed too far from what your intention of depicting is:

Yours  -  edit

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Re: Happy Bird

Reply #9 on: July 03, 2007, 12:48:27 am
hehehe...it look like doraemon xd
it doesnt read as a bird...sorry, but maybe i am blind...
Alevice: nice edit! , but why do you arrange pallette as that? is that useful?
sorry if i go off-topic with this anyway...
« Last Edit: July 03, 2007, 12:50:50 am by smiker »