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Offline sparco

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Sparco's doodle's

on: June 20, 2007, 04:41:12 pm
Sorry for the misunderstanding in my other thread  :P
Well I'll be posting my things here, to start off i made a little blockman, very basic but good for practise right?

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Re: Sparco's doodle's

Reply #1 on: June 20, 2007, 04:57:01 pm
i think you have used too much colors on head... and maybe try to remove black outlines....

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Re: Sparco's doodle's

Reply #2 on: June 20, 2007, 05:31:31 pm
There's little you can learn from doing extremely simple pieces like this. But I'll crit anyhow.

Your lightsoruce is ambiguous, your shading is nil, the head should roll of the body [no neck] and your guy's head is very over-shaded compared the rest of the body.

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Re: Sparco's doodle's

Reply #3 on: June 20, 2007, 06:03:30 pm
You would be better off trying to add substance to stick figures than using this technique.

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Re: Sparco's doodle's

Reply #4 on: June 20, 2007, 09:04:37 pm
You would be better off trying to add substance to stick figures than using this technique.

what do you mean by add substance? you mean like clothes, more fleshy not to blok-ish?

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Re: Sparco's doodle's

Reply #5 on: June 22, 2007, 08:30:18 pm


here's my best work yet also my second :P  what do you guys think?

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Re: Sparco's doodle's

Reply #6 on: June 23, 2007, 01:28:42 am
First glance I see random noisy dithering, lack of contrast, and no shading in a lot of places.  The shoes are out of perspective with any floor he might be standing on, his left hand is missing anything to define it from the background, or even define it as anything other than a yellow blob, and his right hand is missing completely.  The comb looks like a green giraffe, his afro looks like a marble counter, and he seems to be sticking his tongue out at me from under a milk moustache.  The initial lines are pretty good, but beyond that there is no shading to define form except on the pants where the contrast needs to be brought up.  One mistake you haven't made is using retina-burning colors, so I'll commend you on your color choice.  It could be better, but it's one of the better aspects of the piece at the moment.  I see significant improvement from your last blockman, but this still has a lot that could be improved.  Good luck!

Note: I'm sorry if this came off as harsh, but I was just writing what I saw.
Always remember: a preposition is not something you should end a sentence with.