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Modern Love [*Updated Again*]

on: April 12, 2007, 07:22:41 pm
After several centuries of reliance upon his trusty bow, cupid finally decided it was time to modernize.

Previous:
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Current:


These things take time.

Anyway, new stuff. Obviously still very much a WIP, but I thought I'd get help from an early stage this time. Looking for crits on anatomy, pose, colours (so far), etc.

I'm thinking I'm going to have to add a few colours, particularly to the girl's shirt, which is maybe slightly flat looking at the moment in comparison to the rest of the pic. But I might not. Anyway, that's what your opinions are for. :P So, uh... let's hear it!
« Last Edit: April 14, 2007, 04:31:07 pm by Tremulant »

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Re: Modern Love

Reply #1 on: April 12, 2007, 07:38:03 pm
ooh, i like it. the colors are very good so far.

but

-the cupid seemed to shoot him from behind, but his wound is in front, yes?
-i'm not sure if i like how you did the girls legs. it just seems,.. kind of strange for this piece.
-a darker pool of blood maybe.

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Re: Modern Love

Reply #2 on: April 12, 2007, 07:48:00 pm
bloc party.

i like it a lot actually. cupid has never looked so gangster.

The guy is perfect as well. the way he is positioned is just so humorous. the blood on the shirt looks nice too.

im just having trouble adjusting to the girls legs...they are so. fat.

i dig it though. <3
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Re: Modern Love

Reply #3 on: April 12, 2007, 07:49:07 pm
I think the bullet came in the back, and out the front. It happens...

Also, Her right thigh is pretty damn big compared to her left thigh. Speaking of legs, her left foot looks like it's on the wrong plane. Should be further back than the other foot, if she is truly in that position. Her right breast also looks too much like a buff guy's pec, than a females. Usually, female breasts hang off the pectoral muscle, so to speak. Might want to check that out. I like the love shock of the guy, though. Heh, classic...

Great job, anyhow. Now update, slave, update Neeoooww!!
« Last Edit: April 12, 2007, 07:50:48 pm by The B.O.B. »
my back hurts...

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Re: Modern Love

Reply #4 on: April 12, 2007, 07:50:07 pm
The only way the girls legs would look like that is if she were wearing some very unflattering leggings, and she was on the chubby side.  Let the fabric be a bit looser and put some wrinkles in the knee area.

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Re: Modern Love

Reply #5 on: April 12, 2007, 08:38:09 pm
yes the biggest hole is on the front because entry wounds are tiny, whereas exit wounds are what covers the wall in blood and flesh.

a little bit of blood wouldnt go amiss on the back, but its looking great so far

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Re: Modern Love [*Update*]

Reply #6 on: April 12, 2007, 10:31:13 pm
Update. I was working on it as the comments were coming in, obviously, and only just checked the thread now, so appy-polly-loggies if I didn't address some of the crits.. don't worry, though, it'll happen. :P

Alk: The wound thing I think everyone pretty much covered for me :P The girls legs I slimmed; seems to be a problem of mine, overly fat legs... Maybe it's some kind of subconscious fetish... Heh, either way, I'll have to work on that. And the blood... it's a temporary pool, since there'll be a background. I'll recolour to fit when all's done.

clr: Glad you like. ;D Hopefully the legs are better now (fatness-wise, that is... still need a lot of work on the shading, wrinkles and such).

B.O.B: I raised the foot, and I think I see the problem with the breast. The highlight is just way too high up right now. So I'll fix that. I'm glad you like the guy's expression, 'cause originally it was just a generic "oh good Christ, I've been shot in the spine" face as opposed to a love struck one.

Sharm: Again, hopefully they're better now. On a side note, if they aren't (I'm not so great at anatomy, and even less so at female anatomy), I always love edits. ;D

Feron: Good point (about the back-blood). I'll more than likely throw it in next update.

Thanks for all the crits, guys. Like I said (or... maybe I didn't, but anyway), this is still a pretty early WIP so keep the critique coming. For those who care, I'll be away until sometime later tomorrow so I won't be updating anymore at least till then. G'night.

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Re: Modern Love [*Update*]

Reply #7 on: April 12, 2007, 11:11:10 pm
I think with the breasts, there's just too much definition going on. Afterall, she's wearing a hoody, which are usually good at hiding shapes. Indeed, the highlights are too high. If I were you, I'd create the breast area more like a fold/bump in the hoodie than actual breasts.

The wrinkles above the knees seem very unnatural. I'm not exactly sure how they'd come about in real life. The pants fabric would probably pull the folds of flesh tight and bulge a bit but, not wrinkle. Her left hip area is a good example of how it'd work, if you got rid of that really defined crease that is. Or at least shortened it's lenght and replaced it with some softer shading.

While we're at it, the head of the woman seems rather flat. The hair area anyways. I won't go in depth with that though.

Hopefully that helps.

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Re: Modern Love [*Update*]

Reply #8 on: April 12, 2007, 11:30:09 pm
- The guy's back foot needs shape, looks too thin
- Her right leg looks broken, I think the line will need to go straight down for it to work
- Saggy and slanted boobs
- Crotch looks a bit off-center, the zipper line might be too straight. Try slanting the zipper slightly
- Hoody's don't have normal collars, they have V collars. You can't have a functional hood that fits over your head without a V collar
- Her butt is too light, looks paperdolled
- Girl pants need contrast


Looking awesome as always, keep it up. Cupid, and the guy's face are pure gold btw...

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Re: Modern Love [*Update*]

Reply #9 on: April 12, 2007, 11:43:04 pm
isn't cupid supposed to be bald?, for some reason his hair seems to take something away from his character, perhaps slightly bigger wings might look cool also.

i dont like how the smoke goes into the gun, it should begin from a point just above the end.
« Last Edit: April 13, 2007, 10:45:30 pm by Feron »