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[WIP] A young lad. update3.

on: April 11, 2007, 01:16:17 am


this is what I have so far. the head I already have all detailed out, but the body's just blocked in and refined a bit. body colors aren't what I'm definitely using, i was just using different colors to differentiate for now. I'm still not sure what path to take with this.

crits would be appreciated before i start defining the body somewhat or whatever i'm going to do  :)


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Re: [WIP] A young lad.

Reply #1 on: April 11, 2007, 01:46:48 am
i think it would look good if he was wearing like a blue uniform or something...but i dunno. very nice head by the way, i just think the neck is....too big.

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Re: [WIP] A young lad.

Reply #2 on: April 11, 2007, 12:26:10 pm
Actually, it's pretty normal. Some people can have oddly above-average sized necks.

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Re: [WIP] A young lad.

Reply #3 on: April 11, 2007, 12:31:08 pm
Doesn't look very long to me in the first place to be honest. He's just not wearing a shirt without something around the neck.

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Re: [WIP] A young lad.

Reply #4 on: April 11, 2007, 03:12:04 pm
I think miscdude meant the neck looked to thick, not too long. I sort of agree, and I did a small edit (hope you're cool with that, alk):



I did a bit of a general edit on the face, too. You had some banding going on in places (in places your AA... overlapped, for lack of a better term and caused blurriness), especially in the hair. The chin, too, I edited, as I thought it looked a bit small.

The pose, colouring, all that stuff looks pretty good so far. Looking forward to seeing it finished. ;D

P.S.: looking at my edit now, I think your original hair is quite a bit better. The chin, neck, etc. changes should still be... somewhat valid, at least if not entirely useful. :P

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Re: [WIP] A young lad.

Reply #5 on: April 11, 2007, 07:38:47 pm
thanks guys, i see what you mean about the neck. i think your edit lost a bit of the boyish charm tremulant, it's probably mainly the mouth area that you changed that made it look like that I think. I like your hair, I didn't know if mine was too blocky or not. Actually I'm still not sure which one would work better. You're right about the general AAing, I might've overdone it a bit.

I'll see what I can do, thanks for the input.





heading in the right direction? yay, nay?
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Re: [WIP] A young lad. update1.

Reply #6 on: April 12, 2007, 04:39:04 am
much better...now just do the clothes and e can crit on them lol

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Re: [WIP] A young lad. update1.

Reply #7 on: April 17, 2007, 03:18:51 am


blerngh. update. clothes are a rough draft, but boring. any ideas or suggestions? pretty stuck, heh.

i'm not sure how to translate the smooth detail in the head to the body.


oh, and i'm bad at clothing folds.

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Re: [WIP] A young lad. update1.

Reply #8 on: April 17, 2007, 03:35:21 am
his pose and clothing dont match the youth in his face.....other than its good, but the jeans should be dithered for texture.

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Re: [WIP] A young lad. update1.

Reply #9 on: April 17, 2007, 03:47:15 am
For this piece you seem to be using straight ramps, which will make detailed texture on the clothes hard to do.  I'd suggest adding a couple of variant colors, like a sort of fade for the jeans and some saturated colors in the jacket.  I know Helm just tends to dither in various colors on his larger pieces, and it looks nice.  You should try it    :)