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Offline Serena

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A monster

on: March 08, 2007, 04:36:31 am

First off, I don't know what kinda monster it is... I guess it's like some kind of boar?  I wanted to work with a limit of 4 colors, but I ended up adding a highlight color in the end.  I'm pretty proud of it, but I'm looking for critiques! :)

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Edit:  Thanks for your compliments and critiques! I updated as per suggestions here (and deviantart) and changed it a bit to give it more depth and make it's stance look a little more solid.  I think I need to stop working on it for now (I have a baaad habit or overworking things... >_-) but keep the critiques coming! Thanks :)

Current Version:

« Last Edit: March 13, 2007, 01:49:33 am by Serena »

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Re: A monster

Reply #1 on: March 08, 2007, 04:59:30 am
Looks like a sabre tooth tiger/ boar mix.  Reminds me of Buloght's work.  Good job.

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Re: A monster

Reply #2 on: March 08, 2007, 06:00:51 am
It's a sabertooth haina lol. I like the colors, and the paws look a little big to me.

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Re: A monster

Reply #3 on: March 08, 2007, 06:04:35 am
Boabortoohyena.
I really like the face and back and tail but the legs look a bit screwy. Mayhap some references would help? On the face, the outlines are making it a bit crowded. Is that a goatee?

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Re: A monster

Reply #4 on: March 08, 2007, 06:49:27 pm
I updated it a bit... I think it looks better, but keep the critiques coming!  Thanks for the critiques so far!

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Re: A monster

Reply #5 on: March 08, 2007, 10:28:09 pm
-edit-

sorry, was only trying to help.
« Last Edit: March 09, 2007, 06:04:00 am by Terley »
I've not got anything interesting to type here..

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Re: A monster

Reply #6 on: March 08, 2007, 11:20:38 pm
please do not redo my pixels for me. 
untz untz untz?

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Re: A monster

Reply #7 on: March 08, 2007, 11:54:31 pm
I actually preferred the original to Terley's edit. The colors were much more interesting, what with the purple and yellow tints. Terely's makes everything look a bit less interesting. The only thing I agree with is that the hair should look more hairy.
The legs still look wierd. I was going to do an edit but I didn't want to "redo" your pixels. If you want I could find a reference and point out what I think looks odd.

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Re: A monster

Reply #8 on: March 09, 2007, 12:09:58 am
please do not redo my pixels for me.
im not sure, but i think by posting our artwork in this community we are giving people the freedom of editing our work for learning purposes.

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Re: A monster

Reply #9 on: March 09, 2007, 12:15:23 am
well I guess his wishes should be respected?


that being said I think the original is better as well, I don't think the blue in the piece works with it in your edit either. I do like the detail added though.

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Re: A monster

Reply #10 on: March 09, 2007, 01:23:30 am
well I guess his wishes should be respected?

Surely you mean "hers"...

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Re: A monster

Reply #11 on: March 09, 2007, 01:25:52 am
Haha... I love how alkaline assumes I'm a guy. :P

It's ok if Terley edited the original, he probably didn't see the note at the end (which I added later).  Like I said, I just don't want to misrepresent myself by having something in my portfolio that I can't take complete credit for.  Critiques are more vague, so I feel like I can still take credit for the piece.

Xion: I'll take a look at some refs... I'm just trying to think of what animal to reference..  ???

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Re: A monster

Reply #12 on: March 09, 2007, 01:43:31 am
Sorry, I don't read into things.

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Re: A monster

Reply #13 on: March 09, 2007, 02:59:06 am
I would not feel weird or guilty about studying someone else's edits and then applying what you learn in your own way to your pixel art.  If you were simply copy-pasting people's changes I would feel pretty weird about that too, but frequently edits are the only way to effectively convey suggestions or critiques, and are a great chance to learn how other people work and what other people think is important in your work.

That said, it is totally your call - but as long as you are painting the pixels, it is your work, nobody else's!

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Re: A monster

Reply #14 on: March 09, 2007, 05:27:18 am
Yeah, I also encourage you to consider edits, sometimes you may not be inclined to try a critique, but when someone else does it, it pops up at you and you're like, oh!, I see what he means!  I understand your stance however, though I think it would serve you better to approach everything you post here from a "how much can I learn here?" attitude that would benefit you in everything else you do rather than a "how can I make this specific piece better?" attitude.  In other words:  I think it is in your best interest to consider anything that might be valuable for improving all of your work in the futere, rather than sacrificing potential new ideas or techniques merely to save the integrity of one piece.

Of course, like I said, I understand you stance, and if you still don't want edits, that should be respected.

As for the piece:  I like this a lot.  I think you should work on the shape of the tail and the long spiky teeth.  Now they don't seem to curve and sharpen like they should, they are kind of blocky.  Also, I think the further hooves could have one lighter shade.  His rear right foot seems sloppily done.  Perhaps a little of the highlight on the mid torso would bring out more volume.

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Re: A monster

Reply #15 on: March 10, 2007, 11:58:05 pm
Yeah, I also encourage you to consider edits, sometimes you may not be inclined to try a critique, but when someone else does it, it pops up at you and you're like, oh!, I see what he means!  I understand your stance however, though I think it would serve you better to approach everything you post here from a "how much can I learn here?" attitude that would benefit you in everything else you do rather than a "how can I make this specific piece better?" attitude.  In other words:  I think it is in your best interest to consider anything that might be valuable for improving all of your work in the futere, rather than sacrificing potential new ideas or techniques merely to save the integrity of one piece.

Of course, like I said, I understand you stance, and if you still don't want edits, that should be respected.

As for the piece:  I like this a lot.  I think you should work on the shape of the tail and the long spiky teeth.  Now they don't seem to curve and sharpen like they should, they are kind of blocky.  Also, I think the further hooves could have one lighter shade.  His rear right foot seems sloppily done.  Perhaps a little of the highlight on the mid torso would bring out more volume.

I see your guys' point about letting others edit my pixels.  I guess it never occured to me that I could just look at the edits instead of collabing on a piece. >_-.  If anyone reads this: I don't mind if people do edits to my pixels from now on.  I actually think it's really interesting to see other's interptretations, and I can always use help!

And thanks for the suggestions everyone, I'll post an updated sprite when I make the changes.

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Re: A monster

Reply #16 on: March 11, 2007, 12:26:22 am
ok then, ill post this again..

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I've not got anything interesting to type here..

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Re: A monster

Reply #17 on: March 11, 2007, 09:51:35 am
While i prefer the colors of the original, terley's edit shows more volume and texture on the middle section would be a good idea.  This is why edits are good, they allow you to see things that you could do to make your piece better.

As said before, this looks very buloght-esque, which is a good thing  ;)

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Re: A monster

Reply #18 on: March 12, 2007, 12:58:48 am
This looks very good! I like it, kinda reminds me of RedXIII from FFVII :P
The only crtit I have is that I think that his/hers/its backlegs should be at the same level of the front ones

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Re: A monster

Reply #19 on: March 12, 2007, 01:20:29 am
Ricco: Since it is a boar, it must have that height difference...

I really like Terley's edit, but I don't think it is necessary to make those changes, they are good in both ways, it seems like 2 different styles of the same sprite... The pallete if the pallete was changed a bit to look like terley's it would be very nice...  :P
I'm still a newb around here, please be patient TT__TT

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Re: A monster

Reply #20 on: March 12, 2007, 08:48:07 pm
It looks good, although I wouldn't say it looks Buloghty. But I do see potential I think it has it's own style. Keep up the good work the current version looks great.

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Re: A monster

Reply #21 on: March 12, 2007, 10:28:20 pm
If it looks like Buloghty's, that's just a coincidence, 'cause I don't know who that person is... >_>  I think I was trying to go for a vaguely FF6 style, but I didn't look at any refs when I drew it.

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Re: A monster

Reply #22 on: March 13, 2007, 01:50:59 am

Okay, so I think I'm done with this for now.  I took Terley's edit into account and made some changes, and I went back to the bigger legs of the first version... he just didn't look as intimidating with those short legs and rounded hooves. I'm happy with it!  I think I should move to other things now.

Oh yeah, and also gave him some sweet sideburns... aw yeah.

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Re: A monster

Reply #23 on: March 13, 2007, 02:17:09 am
I would fix his rear legs, it's looks a bit disfunctional. I hope you wouldn't mind for editing.=)

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Re: A monster

Reply #24 on: March 14, 2007, 01:01:13 am
I would fix his rear legs, it's looks a bit disfunctional. I hope you wouldn't mind for editing.=)

Yes, thats what I meant when I said that his legs should be leveled!