Space Trooper + First Monstar

[Opacus]

Just a few errors I spot:
-His gun is indeed a bit too bouncy.
-His head turns further then his arm.
-He doesn't seem to show any pressure on the ground, it looks like he's skating.
-His knee doesn't seem to bend, his foot sticks out too far at the highest frame in comparisson to the knee.

[SCiDT]

I drew two frames, my main focus was on getting the body to move like i wanted it too. I think the positions came out well the second pic the legs are weird I know. But thats your area of expertise

Hope these give you some ideas.




I picked up that the legs are hard to bend on this character, best of luck with that

[Ryan Cordel]

With a closer look, you see that the character has a more classic 'metal plate' type of thing going on with his legs. In the other pose, it looks like it's just plain orange-like cloth, since it bends like that and doesn't seem to display any sort of shielding design (or something) like the first frame does.

[SCiDT]

Reshaded.

Also hoping it's got a more consistent sense of motion.

It still looks like only the lith moving

The main problem is that your parts of the character don't move. the line art on the arm stays in one place. etc.

Hope that helps a bit too.

@Ryan - Yeah like i said my main focus was on the body, and it felt trivial with Sherman being able to make the legs just look awesome.
Real tricky, those damn legs 

[Sherman Gill]

Damn you SCiDT! That's exactly what I was trying to do but I couldn't get it right.

Thank you for your critiques and edits, everyone. I'll try to address most of them (if not all).

[Sherman Gill]

Argh, double post dilemma.
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Finished?

[InvaderLupus]

take a closer look at SCiDT's edit. The gun is held in front of the character, as opposed to your awkward pose. Your main issue is the fact that the gun looks like it's bending. You either have to move his left arm forward more (making him pretty much twist his whole body as he runs) or go with a pose similar to SCiDT's.

[Blick]

There should be a vertical motion to him as well. When you push off of the ground, your entire body rises, but in this the character is at a uniform height the entire time.

[Sherman Gill]

I had it doing that before, Blick. But in my ultimate sleepy-wisdom I changed it right before I went to bed.

I'll try changing the gun to more along the lines of Scidt's edit, but right now I'm stressed out by the constant tweaking I've done on this animation.

[Sherman Gill]

I'm going insane from this animation.



Damn you, run cycles!