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Need Critique

on: October 17, 2018, 07:28:21 am
Sprites I made for a game I'm making and just want to know what other think of them, if I'm heading in the right direction, or not.

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Re: Need Critique

Reply #1 on: October 17, 2018, 08:56:54 pm
Please post your art at 100% size so it makes it easier for us to judge and edit your work, the forum has a built-in zoom function :)
Half a noob figuring out stuff.

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Re: Need Critique

Reply #2 on: October 17, 2018, 11:14:06 pm
Please post your art at 100% size so it makes it easier for us to judge and edit your work, the forum has a built-in zoom function :)
My bad I forgot about that, I also did some changes.

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Re: Need Critique

Reply #3 on: October 18, 2018, 12:33:18 pm
All right, neat but the line of action on some of these is weak. IE first guy, green robin hood ninja, at first it looked like his spine was bending inwards. So it's not just the spine that defines the line of action, the limbs support it, it all adds up to the whole.

Second one not doing a lot, third one leaning forward smooth criminal style. Last one is the best. Basically I'm suggesting you push the dynamism, make each one different.

Also all sharing the same proportions = rectangular silhouette which compounds this.

Color contrast on these is pretty bad and a lot of these colors are similar/on a mono ramp. Maybe that's part of the flat indie thing going on for some years, but push past it! You can take this further than that in that style.

Up the contrast in these 3 arenas essentially.

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Re: Need Critique

Reply #4 on: October 18, 2018, 09:23:38 pm
Made an edit on this guy.

I find I just have to play with the pixels til it looks right at this size.  Added 3 pixels to its height.
Note the added contrast as pistachio mentioned.


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Re: Need Critique

Reply #5 on: October 18, 2018, 10:41:46 pm
Made an edit on this guy.

I find I just have to play with the pixels til it looks right at this size.  Added 3 pixels to its height.
Note the added contrast as pistachio mentioned.
I get the contrast but I don't understand what you mean by the "line of action"?  I'm really new to pixel art and drawing in general...

Edit// I changed the sprite but I still don't understand the line of action stuff for pixel art, so I tried using the pose you drew and added to it.
« Last Edit: October 19, 2018, 12:13:39 am by ichimo »

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Re: Need Critique

Reply #6 on: October 19, 2018, 01:57:03 am

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Re: Need Critique

Reply #7 on: October 19, 2018, 05:32:31 am
Oh, so the problem with my first sprites was that they followed a straight line?

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Re: Need Critique

Reply #8 on: October 19, 2018, 12:13:57 pm
Oh, so the problem with my first sprites was that they followed a straight line?

That's a rough approximation of what I meant but there's loads more to it than this. You work out what is different about each guy and stretch stuff like the stance and proportions to fit it as much as the style allows. (if you see consistently you can't stretch this, that's an extremely weak style that you should change or face the wrath of the art gods.) That's still not covering 1% of it tho, indeed you can't cover most of it with words.

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Check the silhouettes of these against yours and the color count also, see how you can tell these dudes apart. That's pretty important for players too.

Apologies if the points of my post ATM are not coming thru, they're pretty rushed now, such is life.
« Last Edit: October 19, 2018, 12:26:11 pm by pistachio »

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Re: Need Critique

Reply #9 on: October 20, 2018, 03:44:49 am
Starting to like art less and less at this point...  ::)