[nudity] Random girl [WIP]

[Grynz]

I want to make sure the lineart is perfect before moving on to the coloring.
C+C and edits are welcomed.

[Soup]

All I can tell is that anatomy is a little messed. But I don't really know how to fix it.

[eqko]

I could've sworn I replied to this ... must've been to harsh ...

it was something along the lines of me feeling sorry for the elephant, with which I meant to sayt
that her legs are to stubby/thick

the upper part of her body could work, but the legs need to be at least 1.5x as long and perhaps more

[Grynz]

Well, edited a lot after Ryu helped me.

But now I can't decide were she's leaning her waist to. Number 1 or 2?

[Elrinth]

yeah I agreed.. strech her out really much...
unless ur trying to reach chibi format

[Terley]

she's still a bit too chunky, its really the thickness of her legs, and those lines under the knees just add the illustion of fat-ness.. also her knees are too low.. Her face looked a tad bit too wide, and her right breasts just looked a bit odd, made some quick edits if it helps.. Also changed the face a bit, if it helps at all..



gl.

[gliding]

you're actually wrong about the knee. Unless you aren't going by the golden ratio.

[Terley]

really?? im meaning 'her' right knee should it not be..



definately lower than the other.. didnt mean to say her 'knees are too low', meant to say 'knee's too low' 

[Helm]

I can't deal with these super-deformed anatomy issues, but I can rightly tell you all of the variations thus far are off in terms of center of gravity. She's leaning back too much.

[sharprm]

Don't worry about pose, make her superdeformed!!!!!!!!

[gliding]

lol, I just noticed that her breasts kept her balance in the first version. (kind of like a big cat's tail does!) 

[Aleiav]

I personally like the chunky versions with thick legs. It doesn't make sense for her to have such massive breasts and skinny legs and hips. You just need to define her features more, like the musclar curves of her legs.

[Grynz]

Progress showing.


I'll add clothes later. It will help hiding the anatomy errors.

[Akzidenz]

Yep. That's a camel toe, alright.

[Helm]

I'd say actually, these are genitals. And on that note, please try to provide some critique and not dubious one-liners, Akzidenz.

Now that's it's shaded, the semi-animesque face (with nose you ought to fix) on the midget body is extremely offputting in my opinion. Though the shading is competent, the anatomy needs work! Don't try to hide things, work on them! Work on your anatomical skills on a non-deformed style and you'll see it will help with the deformed stuff too.

[Akzidenz]

I'd say actually, these are genitals. And on that note, please try to provide some critique and not dubious one-liners, Akzidenz.

You say that as if I never try to critique or offer up advice.

Certainly you permit yourself to a one-liner every now and again, no?

[Helm]

You say that as if I never try to critique or offer up advice.

Certainly you permit yourself to a one-liner every now and again, no?

Yes I do, but not when it is 'that's a camel-toe alright'. If you have more to say on the subject, please send me a PM and I'll be glad to read your thoughts. Let's not derail the thread any further.

[Tube]

I dislike the hair - It looks like it takes a solid form. Also, the thighs are a bit too thick and un-feminine.

[sharprm]

Her right hand looks too small. I like the shading you've done.

[Rox]

I'd say this thread deserves a nudity warning now with that last colored one.

[Ryona]

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I'll add clothes later. It will help hiding the anatomy errors.

Here's what I've noticed...

Her shoulders are a little too big.

Right hand is a little too small.

Face is too plumped.

Ankles should be thicker (for the chibi look).

Right knee needs to be a bit higher.

Upper right arm needs to be a bit more slender.

Abdomen looks too toned for a chibi girl. Reduce the detail.

The curve line of the right breast within the middle needs to be adjusted so that the breast doesn't look like it's being stretched out. Right now it looks like it's resting on a flat surface.

The left foot looks too flat. The top of the foot that meets the ankle should be higher.
Also, the angle of the foot at the back is sloping too much.

The left leg needs to look a bit fuller.

The legs could be a bit longer. Especially the lower part.

The right shoulder needs to be a bit more curved.

The right eyebrow needs to be wider.

The head should be moved forward a bit.

The base of the neck should be a bit more slender.

The way her bangs are spread out on the sides looks odd to me. Personally I'd change that. Have the bangs in front. The way it looks right now just bothers me.

Oh, and I'm seeing too many squares within her eyes. Her eyes are big enough for you to be able t round her irises and such.



That's about it for now. The shading is very good though.