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Snowy Place

on: November 29, 2006, 05:50:42 pm


This is a small mock-up I've made, to break out of my comfort zone.
The story goes like this, you are a snow fairy who lost her wings. And now she has to find them.

Any critique would be great.

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Re: Snowy Place

Reply #1 on: November 29, 2006, 06:00:54 pm
interesting colors...  feels very cold... :)

backgrounds lacking detail perhaps? :S

Did the fairy lose her head too? ... and is she related to a lemming? :D
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Re: Snowy Place

Reply #2 on: November 29, 2006, 06:02:54 pm
Very nice setting, suits the story that goes with it. the fairy looks a bit plain though maybe make her a bit bigger? (it is a girl right?)

Anyway nice use of the c64 palette, looks great ;) :y:

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Reply #3 on: November 29, 2006, 06:08:23 pm
is it a C-64 pallette? I guess it's similar but it's not quite there...  (I might be wrong) -

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Reply #4 on: November 29, 2006, 06:10:41 pm
I thought it was. Looks like it to me unless i've gone thick in the head :crazy:

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« Last Edit: December 01, 2006, 07:08:10 pm by Scotteh »

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Re: Snowy Place

Reply #5 on: November 29, 2006, 06:20:10 pm
he's not online scott - i believe he's prolly gone back to his lair to work on many of his quirky masterpieces...

and on that note... I too must creep back to my hole - to await the sunsrise and another fun filled day.

Farewell.



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Re: Snowy Place

Reply #6 on: November 29, 2006, 10:27:13 pm
@Scotteh:
No it's not the C64 palette.

I don't think I'll make her any bigger, because she will get her wings back early in the game.

@Baccaman21:
Yes, the background I just kind of slapped on, I'll work on it some more.

Now that you mension it, she does look like a lemming.


EDIT:

I added some detail to the background(not too happy with it).

I completely redid the fairy(and one pixel taller to!) and gave her, her wings.

« Last Edit: November 30, 2006, 04:53:12 am by Kcilc »

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Re: Snowy Place

Reply #7 on: November 30, 2006, 05:01:43 am
good but the fairy's hands are too big compared to the rest of her

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Re: Snowy Place

Reply #8 on: November 30, 2006, 06:49:06 am
Right now the whole thing looks like they are normal ground tiles with a white/blue palette. It doesn't scream "I'm made out of snow and ice"
I would give the sides bigger cuts, as if it were an iceberg that tore from some land or something. And I'd up the contrast and saturation of some colors to make it look more icy.
The tiles dont look repetitive, so I guess you did a good job, though they look rather flat.

The character itself doesn't read that well, though it improved from what you had at first.
Also I'm not really a fan of those black/dark blue outlines on it. While it works making the character stand out, I think the whole focus gets shifted to it. I'd make it lighter.
But that might be just me.

Good luck with further updates



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Re: Snowy Place

Reply #9 on: December 01, 2006, 05:15:38 am


@Hidden killer:
 I hope her hands are small enough now(they are one pixel, heh).

@Panda:
Well, I think I covered your post in my update, except do you mean "though they look rather flat." as in none of them look as though they are in font/behind each other? if so, I will add that to my update list.