AuthorTopic: [WIP] SHMUP Title Screen (Read 12235 times)

Lelle · **on:** November 25, 2006, 01:13:01 am

Heya,

started working on the title screen for my "mobile game" today. Been working 5 hours on it now so my eyes itch and I´m getting tired so I´m posting it here as WIP so that I don´t do any big mistakes! Hoping there will be some comments to work on here by tomorrow when I wake up ;]
Latest edit:

Cheers,

Lelle

EyeCraft · **Reply #1 on:** November 25, 2006, 02:48:38 am

Wow this is looking great! Good anatomy! Issues I see:

- palette could maybe use some hue-shift
- his head's shading is weird, looking like he has a gigantic scar
- I don't know exactly what, but HIS left shoulder muscles seema little bit weird
- The body seems to shrink inside the singlet, mainly on THE left side, its like theres a section of his body has been scooped away.
- Maybe a little bit more contrast, esp on the singlet

buloght · **Reply #2 on:** November 25, 2006, 02:53:47 am

Hey, this looks really great

Maybe the bottom of the gun could show more perspective at the angle he is holding it.

zhangyue27334 · **Reply #3 on:** November 25, 2006, 03:08:04 am

en~~I look your picture...I think...You need study anthropotomy again,and you should play any game of "SNK"~~becaue they can protract very cool anthropotomy by the pixel~~

I commend you go to this china pixel index~~look!! http://www3.emu-zone.org/host/emugif/index.htm

You can in this index to down load any more pexel GIF animations~~

wish you good luck~~

Lelle · **Reply #4 on:** November 25, 2006, 02:34:43 pm

Thanks for help all! I tried to correct everything as good as I could. I hope I improved it some! Still don´t know exactly how the body or arm will end...

Thanks for the site zhangyue27334, very nice! I will try to work more on the anatomy every chance I get, I have drawn women almost exclusively so not too used to drawing men

A newer edit:

Edit: Found a way for the other arm ;]

Time for a well needed shower!

Cheers,

Lelle

Fly · **Reply #5 on:** November 25, 2006, 09:16:18 pm

It would look really neat if you could have some type of thing goin on behind him.. Maybe some barrels of oil, or fire or something. Or a military outpost or something.. I like it

Turbo · **Reply #6 on:** November 26, 2006, 04:18:54 am

Just playing around with it, taking it a bit further.

I think you should angle the gun upwards a bit.

Lelle · **Reply #7 on:** November 26, 2006, 11:21:47 am

Thanks for the edit! Though he is looking too buffed for my liking, like a bodybuilder like Ronnie Coleman rather than a well trained agile military guy. Also his biceps and triceps looks like they are contracted too much. Like in his right arm holding the gun upwards, that biceps gives the look of someone that´s holding his arm with the fingers rotated to the face. The biceps looks different depending on how you rotate your hand(supinated to pronated) so mine is not supposed to be fully contracted on either arm. Also because of the position the triceps will be somewhat relaxed. Trapezius seem a bit too long too. You point out many flaws I will take care of though, thanks! :]

I had a new picture too, I had problem with it showing yesterday so maybe no one can see it, uploaded it again...

I will try and make some background for it :]

Cheers,

Lelle

Turbo · **Reply #8 on:** November 26, 2006, 03:47:46 pm

Yes, that edit wasn't exaclty serious, just throwing hyper huge "soldinator" idea out there, going crazy with it

.

However, the gun part was serious. Your version is botheringly out of perspective - probably due to the part showing near the barrel. And i'd still angle the "body" of the gun upwards, while keeping the handle in the same position you have.

I'd tilt the head a pixel back. Maybe straighten it upwards a bit (as in "straightening his back, and the neck").

Also, i prefer the version with just one gun. The lower hand holding the gun doesn't convey enough MANLINESS, it's kind of soft. Lock his wrist, align the hand it with the arm, and pump the lower arm muscles!!! Or replace the lower machine gun with an army knife, the blade pointing downwards! (ready to KILL KILL KILL - even if there's no knife in-game)

The game is looking great, good luck with it

Lelle · **Reply #9 on:** November 27, 2006, 12:04:21 am

Thanks for all the comments Turbo, I thought about it all while I continued to work on it. Got much better with your help! Though the guns have to stay, cause in the game he is supposed to run around with 2 guns and I would like to reflect that in the title screen :] I think I fixed much about the perspective on the gun though, I had forgot to add lots to the hand there regarding perspective in the first place.

Here's an early pic of the main char, haven´t worked much on it yet, he even has hair here, hehe:

Got an update now, with some background!

I made an explosion to put in the background. Can barely see it behind him though :[

Cheers and Goodnight,

Lelle

Fly · **Reply #10 on:** November 27, 2006, 03:35:44 am

AWSOME! See, now doesnt it seem so much more professional with that background? Nice work, it looks beautiful for an explosion of war!

sharprm · **Reply #11 on:** November 27, 2006, 04:45:13 am

At the moment the new head looks to me like an ugly baby or something. Maybe you should give him a bigger chin.

Rydin · **Reply #12 on:** November 27, 2006, 05:39:31 am

Based on the new side view of the gun, that's how I think the one in his right hand should look more like.

Also, while editing, I saw that there's a dark, near-black color that you could just get rid off under the gun (I didn't though

).

It looks good; I'm no anatomy expert, so I can't help much there. His head almost looks flat now, I personally like the first one version of his head better.

Other than that, I'd say it'll make an excellent titlescreen.

Good job.

baccaman21 · **Reply #13 on:** November 27, 2006, 10:12:56 am

Quote from: zhangyue27334 on November 25, 2006, 03:08:04 am

en~~I look your picture...I think...You need study anthropotomy again,and you should play any game of "SNK"~~becaue they can protract very cool anthropotomy by the pixel~~

I commend you go to this china pixel index~~look!! http://www3.emu-zone.org/host/emugif/index.htm

You can in this index to down load any more pexel GIF animations~~

wish you good luck~~

I figured your from china? or the far east at least... (hence your use of grammar) - I welcome you to the boards and thanks for posting here...

This link you've posted is fantastic... thanks... some excellent resources in there...

only downside is navigating around it with all the chinese script... :S

cheers...

lelle... titlescreens looking nice... I may have a fiddle later with it see if i can give you some pointers... but for now I'm a bit busy... l8rs

Jad · **Reply #14 on:** November 27, 2006, 11:06:28 am

It's EDITZ TIME!

(added the hair just because, lolz, you said he was going to have it, you know. :>)

I played around with the colours (omg, the colour ramp slides from blueish (shadow) to yellowish (highlights) it's like so ORIGINAL SOMEHOW JAD. It works, though, almost always.) and made him more leather-y coloured. I also added some OMG DRAMTIC ambient lighting (lightning!) to both him and the title that I think came out well. It's badly AA:ed in some places but the general effect works, I think. Just a suggestion to add more DRAMA!

But please play with colours and contrast, it makes pictures so much more fun :] And use Graphics Gale if you want to do that too, because it makes playing around with colour ramps so much more fun and easy, heh :]]

Good luck, though, I see you improving all the time

!

sharprm · **Reply #15 on:** November 27, 2006, 12:07:24 pm

Here's my messy edit. Not sure it shows you much but basically wanted to see what it would look like with a different head. Changed the explosion to a burning city though maybe a burning oil pipeline might be more appropriate. Just thought that a big white
explosion might get in the way of menu options.

Lelle · **Reply #16 on:** November 27, 2006, 12:18:11 pm

Thanks for comments all! I changed the face again, it actually did look like a big baby like sharprm said :] I also changed the guns slightly.
Newest version:

NICE edit Jad! I was going to add some ambient glow from the explosion later on though so don´t worry! :] I love the colours, I must play around some with it to test some. thanks for all the tips! :]

Whoa sharprm! That´s truly nice! You have convinced me to remove that boring explosion I made! Looks very nice! And since you both has drawn hair I guess I will have put hair on him too since it looks so awesome!

Cheers,

Lelle

sharprm · **Reply #17 on:** November 27, 2006, 12:28:12 pm

I like the face better. The explosion you made is quite nice, it might be better to keep it. Only probs is the guns look a bit futuristic now. Keep
up the good work.

DrDerekDoctors · **Reply #18 on:** November 27, 2006, 12:32:05 pm

Do big explosions look like that? I mean, surely as they're the actual light source you wouldn't see much shading on them until the initial blast was cooling down and becoming more smokey?

Lelle · **Reply #19 on:** November 27, 2006, 08:31:44 pm

Okidoki, got a pretty big update now!

I hesitated to use a city since you used that sharprm but anything else just didn´t cut it. Added a heli too for more action. Also changed the guys colours to represent the environment a bit better, and added hair if anyone missed it! ;]

Thanks for the help again all!

Cheers,

Lelle

sharprm · **Reply #20 on:** November 28, 2006, 07:00:07 am

I don't think the new skin colors look that good. Maybe make the third lightest skin color more greyish. The helicopter
is a nice addition.

Lelle · **Reply #21 on:** November 28, 2006, 07:23:14 pm

Yea I´m not too good with colours, need to read that colour-thread again! :|

Another update. Will be 176x208 pixels from now on:

Changed the explosion into a burning fire instead, looked too "cartoonish" I think.

Cheers,

Lelle

Ragnarok · **Reply #22 on:** November 28, 2006, 07:34:18 pm

I'm no expert, but I preferred it without the hair...

Lelle · **Reply #23 on:** November 28, 2006, 07:44:34 pm

Like this?

I like it too actually. Gah! Decisions... :]

Edit: with the help of sharprm I have come up with a new face for him!

junkboy · **Reply #24 on:** November 30, 2006, 04:27:53 pm

This looks great. I'm quite obsessed with topdown military-shooters, so I've enjoyed seeing the progress you've made. I prefer the earlier logo with the I's and O's looking like cartridges though. It was a very neat and tacky idea, just perfect for this type of game!

I'd also like to see the guy there sporting some sort of combat-vest. A simple tank-top doesn't exactly convey the "badass motherfucker" image that usually goes with bald guys waving a pair of submachine guns. Arnold Schwarzenegger is a fine inspiration for things like this, as seen here and here.

Xion · **Reply #25 on:** November 30, 2006, 06:53:47 pm

His expressiion is too soft. Not enough rage/adrenaline/stress. He looks so... casual.
The helicopter kind of looks like an afterthought. The propellors have no sense of motion (unless they would be animated in the game)
It looks more like a TV copter than a war one, which I think would be more fitting for this image.
Something like an Apache maybe.
Aside from that, this is turning out nicely.
The shirt could use more contrast.

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